To the Wind

I gave my blood

spilled and cold 

it sat

I took your love,

mixed it in.

Rumors.... high in the flying wind

will never disperse

only rise again and again

I'd wished I could but 

never ever knew

what was in that heart of gold

I sat and pondered 

long and hard...

had we stopped to care?

I asked why we couldn't dare.

The Earth is lax

and the sky is fat

but all in all

it's only dangerous til we die.

I'd love all that's human

if I knew it was only blood

It's the parts we don't see

makes me need you mixed with me.

Reviews

[zainul]

Love the splendid work.
You added blood to love and acted like an experienced supernatural druggist or chemist.
The idea is really excellent.
Congratulations,Mark!!!
Wish you a very Happy New Year 2014!

[Mark]

Thank you very much :)

[zainul]

You are most welcome :)

[icelandicblue]

We are but humans to steal a phrase dust in the wind. Loved your reference to a heart of gold but visually I found this stanza to be the most memorable:

Rumors.... high in the flying wind
will never disperse
only rise again and again

There is truth and wisdom in those words.

[Mark]

Thanks blue, your insight always warms me.

[Frieda P]

Well there certainly aren't any zephyrs in this one....darkly colored side of you Mark.

[Mark]

Lol you are fixating on that word again.

[Frieda P]

I thought you might get a kick out of it, ;-P

[Mark]

Haha you haven't lost your sense of humor at least.

[Frieda P]

*at least* ftw is that even supposed to mean? lol ;-P

[Mark]

Your penchant to fixate on a word I guess.

[Frieda P]

Ha I'm obsessive compulsive, what do you expect? ;-)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Another very melancholy and flowing write until the final stanza which I struggled with Mark?

[Mark]

My love for humanity is aware of its vulnerability. Humans are more than just physical beings; which can be awe inspiring but also terrifying.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I got that but the final two lines seemed rather..........forced?

[Mark]

That's interesting. I rewrote the last two lines three times. Lol

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Ok to be frank it sound like the rhyme forced the words rather than organically fitted your theme. Just my view mark and the rest is your usual wonderful poetry.

[Mark]

You and I seem to have this connection don't we? Almost scary. I didn't know, and still not sure, how to end this one but I am grateful for friends like you to point out flaws and offer their honest support.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Mark I hate the platitudes on here but don't blame folk for them. But for me it is about supporting and developing together in an honest way. Well we have travelled different paths but they have the same potholes.