Autumn 2013

A gentle breeze brings the first shiver

and wish for wool of the season.

Seeded by Summer crickets, the air

is now full of soon to sleep promise.

Cold night blooms chase away the Sun

grown tired, leaving us sooner each night;

its vibrance spent. The green turning,

all the lands whisper of sleep and white covers soon to come.

Even the roads' whining seems half hearted

as they make no attempt to hold scattered leaves.

Only the wind seems to have life;

a cold harbinger of the ice coming.

Reviews

[SHEEMA HUQ]

A picturesque tribute to the autumn season.

[moog-drika]

You wonderfully explained the beauty of the season... loved it ^_^

[Nia Hope]

I really like all of the descriptions awesome job :)

[TL Boehm]

Seeded by Summer crickets, the air

is now full of soon to sleep promise.

favorite line today. autumn is my favorite time of year.

[Mark]

Thanks hon, do you send out RR's?

[Ruth]

The circle is always open isn't it? The delicate and yet overpowering seasonal exhalation alters so many things for some people....this is lovely hon! x

[Mark]

yes it is, and thank you for your thoughts, I'm glad you liked :)

[s y e]

AUTUMN IS AMAZINGGGGG!

I loved this one, your imagery is amazing. I love the colours of the leaves and just Autumn in general!

Woo, loved this one!

[Mark]

big HUGZ~! thanks hon, Autumn is a great time of year. Autumn and Spring are my favorites, endings and beginnings. :)

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Great imagery in this one...makes me want to snuggle up on the couch with a nice, warm blanket. The seasons are changing...both physically and metaphorically in this piece. The image/idea I like the most is the sun "grown tired" and leaving us sooner every night...great personification of the great golden goddess of the daytime sky.

[Mark]

Thanks for reading. Glad you like it.

[Mockingbird]

it is an accurate description of what is happening in the interim. it's a nice farewell to summer. it also has foreboding elements when talking about the arrival of winter. great job.

[Mark]

Thank you Mb :) So good to see your comments. :)

[dw817]

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I just saw the movie, Tinkerbell, Secret Of The Wings, and your poem very much reminds me of the difference they showed between Winter and Summer. While I consider myself a winter person, I understand the importance of summer - new life for new vegetation and the coming of spring - hope.

Thanks for sharing this cool and wintry poem, Mark !

[Mark]

Glad you liked it David. Thanks for stopping by :)

[dw817]

UBetcha ! I'm always fond of poems and stories about winter. My favorite being from Jack London, "To Build A Fire," which I read back in Middle school. A 'chilling' tale to say the least but one that made a lasting impression on me and my fascination with Winter and the cold.

"The man remained silent. Later, the dog whined loudly. And still later it crept close to the man and caught the scent of death. This made the animal bristle and back away."
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[Mark]

Ya thats my very favorite Jack London story. I been in cold like that. Never had to do what he did though lol.

[dw817]

You've been in that kinna cold ? Where at and what were you doing there ?

[Mark]

I grew up in Alaska from age 12 to 21.

[dw817]

Why did you leave ? That has gotta be like the best place to live ! Man I really wanted to live in Antarctica.

[Mark]

It wasn't the cold so much it was the darkness. In Winter it gets dark by 3pm and stays dark untl about 10 am.

[dw817]

I would definitely love to live in a cool and safe environment like that. :D