Storms, Oceans, and Love

Just a fictional write.

I felt the storm coming;

raising the color in my eyes.

It was dark and gray lonely,

rushing headlong through the skies.

There was lightning, there was rain

and the air smelled freshly showered.

Thunder rumbling through in pain;

I felt the storm.

Looking west I saw you painted on the sky.

I looked to see if you saw me

as the storm rushed you on by.

But then you were gone, moved on.

Rain drenching me to the skin

Restoring in steam, what I know.

Clean, and never again this fresh

Sun and clouds beam, creating steam below

Love is an ocean pent up each inside.

Some never find it and so never learn

Others can't keep back that holy tide;

when it's coming... they feel the storm.

I might have felt outdrawn

but I swim in my own design

What we never had at all

Doesn't matter, I'll be fine.

And when the clouds come define

and the gray black rolls me over

I'll feel my love aligned

by white streaks of lightning.

Reviews

[Ruth]

As always hon, the flow is superbly rendered and I could lose a little time in this, as in, forget where I was lol Beautifully done x

[Mark]

Thank you Poppy! :)

[Leslie Philibert]

I know Mark, and admire the way he structures his work on real situations, this is writing from real life, translated with skill into literature

[Mark]

Thanks Leslie, always good to see your reviews. :)

[Christapp123]

This was actually really good! I loved how the storm expressed the emotion of the person.
Check out my stories if you please, when you have the time. I've posted one so far. A romance of course.

[Mark]

I rarely read stories. You can send me an RR if you wish.

[TL Boehm]

Exquisite writing. I saw you painted in the sky. Love that line. Love the whole metaphor of water and rain and lightning. Such a strong poem.

[Angi]

Mark! Now this is poetry. I could feel a letting go in your words. It feels like you just let these words tear through you, just like that storm raged through. Very well done. Angi~

[Mark]

THank you so much Angi. Your praise means a lot to me.

[Angi]

Hey, it is always a pleasure to stop on your pages. You are so welcome.

[Baby Ricochet]

Great write bro. You could teach me a thing or two about poetry,

[Mark]

Thanks Mark. Glad you liked :)

[s y e]

This is a lovely simple write, Mark - You have blown me away with the wording of this write. I loved it.

Mumma's proud. ;-)

[Mark]

Thank you sweet lady. I'm always glad when I can move someone I admire! :)

[Ankit Mahar]

What a lovely poem. Simple but heart touching. I don't have words for this poem. It was just great. Keep sending read reviews.

[Mark]

I'm glad you liked, thanks for reading :)

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

I love the heart in this piece; the texture of rawness and emotion is truly palpable. Great use of imagery and language to guide your concept along from start to finish.

I'll feel my love aligned
by white streaks of lightning. -- these lines were really great.

This piece was the manifestation of an inevitable storm...the most destructive forces can also be the most touching and most beautiful. Well done.

[Mark]

Beauty and destruction. Funny how those two concepts come in one package so often. Thank you :)