This Time

A blues lyric

I looked into those eyes

and I refused to let it shine.

you and I go down

that road too many time.

Oh, I felt my heart crispin'

I walked away in lies.

I knew I was deceivin'

Why would you change my mind?

Just look my way again

and I know I'll fall this time.

Oh just look my way once more

and I won't need any other sign.

Fallin' for you baby

is like drinkin' bitter wine.

Ya I fell hard but maybe

there's good in what we find.

I looked into your eyes

and I fell out of my mind.

Ya, you and I got down

and I pretend now that I'm fine.

Walkin' away now baby

don't try and pretend you're kind.

I know you're bad and lonely

And I won't be  a wastin' time.

Fallin' for you baby

is like drinkin' bitter wine.

Fallin' for you but maybe

I won't hit my head this time.

Reviews

[TL Boehm]

You know what? I was just gonna say this was a fine bluesy lyric piece and then I looked at your description and smacked my forehead. Have you met me? I am Captain Obvious!
I like the grit this one has - indicative of the genre - there is a strength in the heartache. Yeah, you kicked the crap out of me and it hurt but I am not incapacitated kind of thing. I like the repetitive elements in this as well.

[Mark]

umm... why did you smack your forehead exactly? LOL Thanks so much for the kind review ;)

[SHEEMA HUQ]

I like your use of colloquialisms and your captive stance, very well done!

[Kristin Lee]

Great lyrics. I love the bit about falling for you being like bitter wine. since love is both intoxicating and in this case, horrible at the same time.

[Zeverin Kpai]

Should anything be sad about this piece other than reenactment and adding it to favourites? I am guessing here help me out ;)

[Mark]

Did it make you feel sad? Or just upset your stomach? :P Thanks for commenting.

[Infinite hexes]

Great use of words here, and this rhymed very well. A great write.

[eglantine]

"Fallin' for you baby
is like drinkin' bitter wine." Great lyrics!

[s y e]

The last line is classic, I loved this Mark - awesome blues, awesomely written, too.

[Holly Mason]

love that last line...
content just whisks a reader through a love tale seen through your eyes
good blues song...reads with a lyrical flow
thank you for sharing....I bought ya a blind fold*)*)

[Stanley Wilson]

awesome there's an American rhythm and blues artist in st ives called ben Jordan. I'm imagining the collaboration. You have a hit on your hands

[KeelyJane]

Love the last line. This was a nice flowing piece with good rhyme. Nice job friend.