Skin Deep

The dust of a star 

and comets made mud.

We were formed into halves 

wanting to be whole.

The success of the species

is due to it's nature

In stars, and rivers, oceans, and mountains

we see it, we feel it, we deny it, we fantasize it...

attraction.

Reviews

[Angi]

Excellent title, Mark. You say it all in a few short words. Love. ~Angi

[Mark]

thanks my friend :)

[Angi]

My pleasure.

[Brandon S. Whitten]

Indeed, skin deep. Would love to see this thought go further, it's inspiring. Splendid read and write.

[Mark]

Thank you sir :)

[Brandon S. Whitten]

You are welcome

[Vria P Crow]

INTRODUCTION

This is a beautiful a t t r a c t i o n :)

THE MAGNIFYING GLASS

"The dust of a star
and comets made mud."

Beautiful allusion to astrology and science.

"We were formed into halves
wanting to be whole."

This is a universal quote. However, I love how you combined it with astrology.

"In stars, and rivers, oceans, and mountains"

This line depicts the elements with b e a u t y. This reminds me of the Book of Genesis.

CONCLUSION

I, for one, enjoyed the punch line: "attraction."
I loved how you have combined poetry with science and faith.

Nicely done, Mark!

[Mark]

wow, to be compared to a book in the bible is humbling. Thank you so much for reviewing.

[Vria P Crow]

You are welcome sweetie:D

I am more of a Scholar then religious, but your poetry reminds of the Psalms and Proverbs which are my favorites!

[Mark]

yes, I am more interested in the history behind the writings then the religious meanings.

[Vria P Crow]

This earns respect :) I am more into history as well :)

[Mark]

It's good to meet a like mind. xoxo

[Vria P Crow]

Well met, kind sir! *hugs

[John Alexander McFadyen]

An eloquent poem on our nature and a plea to return to that nature.

[Kristin Lee]

We were formed into halves wanting to be whole...I love this line. So much passion and truth in your words. Especially the bit about denial. Beautifully written.

[Archangel Gabriel]

Mark, Chris and Leslie could not have put it better. Lovely piece of thought provoking writing in a few well chosen words

[Leslie Philibert]

A poem that impresses me with both textual simplicity and semantic strength...

[dw817]

⊰ℛℛ⊱
Attraction ? Some can be quite fatal, others can be quite devastating. For the attractions I've had (and have partaken of) in life, I can't honestly say one of them has not in some way been bittersweet. Merely for the fact, they continued, or - worse yet, they ceased to continue.

Passion, attraction, and desire - all revolve around the same 3-bladed Shuriken, and no matter which way you grab it, you will always get cut - and sometimes - the feeling is so strong we ignore the damage we do, not just to ourselves but to others.

And we call that, perhaps out of our own naive innocence - LOVE.

[Mark]

yes, grab it and get cut. And yet we are mesmerized into grabbing it again, and again.

[dw817]

It does hurt. And I know I will always be grabbing for it tho. :)

[Baby Ricochet]

The success of a species is due to it's nature. That's gold that is.