We Go

It all starts in our heads.

On this carousel

wind at my back, 

then in my face.

Blurred visions red then black, white, and gold.

Spin off drops

create a lake to live in.

Forged shapes cool, creating steam,

from dreams to the real, then

becoming what I show you.

Dropping, lost thoughts

fertilize so new ones grow.

Will they point the way we go?

Reviews

[SHEEMA HUQ]

This reads like a poetic gardening manual, nice imagery.

[s y e]

"Forged shapes cool, creating steam,
from dreams to the real, then
becoming what I show you."

~~ This is amazing, a really strong write. Life is a carousel in itself.

~ Noodle.

[Mark]

yes it is, I'm glad you agree. :)

[Chris]

Round and around we go... the third stanza is quite strong.

[Mark]

Thank you for reading.

[AYVID N]

The carousal spins endlessly...And in the flurry of visions and colors..Old gives way to new...we just hope we stay aligned... A beautiful thought. Awesome read!

[Baby Ricochet]

Nice....... Great read.. Applause all around the world.

[Mark]

Glad you liked. Thanks buddy.

[Renée]

holy cow ! Carousel gone wild ! backwards, forwards, and just when I think I need dramamine it slows down to find the way... uff sounds like crazy love ..

[Mark]

Crazy something heehee.. thanks for reading

[Renée]

defiantly crazy q ;

[Kristin Lee]

I enjoyed the transient and ever changing feel to this one. Much like the changing thoughts in ones head. Particularly the last stanza where you talk about letting things go and making room for new life. With the hope that it will guide the way. Well done.

[Mark]

past experiences give us the map for future ones. Thanks for your thoughts. :)

[SyberRose]

Life is a carousel...and we live our life again through each child...Enjoyed Mark:)

[Mark]

is the word spelled the same when we mean ka-RAHW- sul? it bugs me now LOL THank you for reading and enjoying :)

[SyberRose]

I pasted your spelling ha...i was having trouble writing it.

[Mark]

to carouse... d****t... lol to go out drinking, partying... how is that spelled? mmm

[SyberRose]

carouse...i just looked it up ha

[Mark]

heh, wow. I was right. carousel... it's all in how you pronounce it :P Thanks hon.

[SyberRose]

Next time make it a merry go round...ha

[Mark]

no, that was point... I wanted the double meaning, but wasn't sure if I was getting it.

[Robbie~xoxo~]

If only our muses would be still! lol
I felt dizzy (in a happy way), whilst reading this... truly a carousel, Mark! ;))
Nicely done. :)

[Mark]

Thank you Robbie, and thanks for stopping by :)

[Leslie Philibert]

Great, especially the first stanza, an apt and acute observation...the kind of lines that make you say, right,
that`s right...

[Mark]

thank you Leslie

[Mark]

Thank you so much Leslie.