Not really sure

to dream and wonder

I've been taking the long way lately
To see how I feel in the way you smile
when you look, see what you feel
about this hook by the crook.

To do what I do and notice
you noticing.
Not really sure, not really there
not really here but drinking in.

I let the stars toss that
in the jingle jangle casino.
Praying for a new burst bright
and blinding from the dust.

No answer do they have
but they look pretty
and the galaxy has milk,
while Venus looks charmed.

Sun bursts and radios
hum the static of our attraction
I feel/see the sear, our sizzling senses,
and tongues wet for salvation.

A prayer, a genuflection
a geniune confluence
your ying, my yang
From the darkness, the suns create.

Reviews

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Introspection and some fine wording, very good indeed.

[Mark]

Thank you, I was just pretty much playing around with words on this one. Glad you enjoyed. :)

[Kristin Lee]

Relationships so rarely make sense, at least not the way we want them to. They are never a one size fits all. I like the mixed flow of this one that reflects those inner musings. Great job.

[Mark]

Thanks for reading. :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oh this is classic...yes, relationships..don't try to understand them, just live them...

just let them happen naturally...

we overanalyze life i think...anticipation, expectation, frustration.

if we just let it flow more...i think more relationships would work out.

[Mark]

yes, that is so true. If only I could relax and turn off the mind machine. LOL

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A poised reflection on ones own abiliy to interpret the benign results of actions and fears, well done, good read.

[rhythm&blues]

Good reflections on relationships, like the last stanza the best.

[Mark]

Thanks for reading. :)

[Ruth]

Excellent piece that invites and describes perfectly xx

[Mark]

Thanks Poppy, I'm glad you read and commented. :)

[Emily B]

the kind of poem i could walk through every day and never get tired of

[Mark]

wow, thank you Emily :)

[Frieda P]

I'm not sure if this a prayer or internal dialogue, either way i like it, it wraps itself nicely around that thought that there could just be something there, nice one Mark.

[Leslie Philibert]

Like this, especially the internal rhyme in the last line of the first verse, and the quality quatrains, as well
as the good content - a poem that works..