A Morning Haiku

All these senryus going around, I thought I'd get in on the fun. Saw this sight and was inspired, somewhere in Ohio on Route 30 near the Indiana border.

Gray- white mists hover

Sun tries in vain to touch Earth

Clouds got to her first.

Reviews

[redflutterby]

Romantic and dreamy... perfect description of the view out a window laying in bed cuddling. ;-)

[Mark]

*snuggle snuggle* :)

[Kristin Lee]

Love the imagery this inspires. Well done.

[Mark]

thanks

[Leslie Philibert]

fine poem. Read this !

[Zahra]

Great haiku, beautiful imagery in just 3 lines. Beautiful.

[AYVID N]

Very beautiful. Created just the right picture.

[Angi]

I love this, Mark. It feels like the sun is yearning for the earth and he was beat out by the clouds! Poor sun..

[Mark]

exactly the image I was trying to convey Angi, so glad you saw that! Thanks

[Angi]

:)

[Mockingbird]

at first i found it melancholy, however your rhythm and rhyme make it feel lighter. great job.

[Mark]

I was hoping for vaguely sexual/romantic... Thanks for reading MB, haven't seen a post of yours in awhile :)

[quinfinn]

a very good senryu, and yes, i have witnessed this battle many times! well done, Mark!

[Mark]

Thanks Quin

[Frieda P]

Seems to be a lot of that cloud cover going around, nice one Mark, first try and you slammed it.

[Mark]

I've been writing Haiku's since high school, thanks for reviewing Frieda