present future past

a life is a journey, but not one way. Our memories may not be movies, but they essentially are our past.

Painted in so few strokes

blue canvas, sad madness

trips; exploding light

I somehow fell

into tomorrow, with some sorrow

legs caught in yesterday

stretched life beyond 

just years, and my fears

I mourn the black and white

Tunnels have light

at the end, where we mend

enjoy, and be the ride.

Reviews

[SHEEMA HUQ]

some very clever lines in this succinct poem I felt, well done Mark

[Ruth]

Our lives painted in only a way we can do ... learning...progression, nicely done! :)

[captain]

the title is really intriguing. i wonder the future in the middle, then the poem paints a sorrowful then hopeful end. I like it.

[Mia]

Hello Mark :)
I love this poem, especially the second stanza. How you managed to get the feel of a full journey into so few lines and even more than that your word play/chose is wonderful! I enjoyed this very much!

[Blue Ivory]

This is artistic on so many levels! Excellent work! I love the depth and passion that you can put into your writing. This is beautiful...

[Mark]

Thank you < 3

[Little Birdie]

Essentially, there is no clear present and no clear future, no tense that isn't already plagued, not a moment in which we aren't haunted by shadows and sleeping with ghosts. No memory that doesn't mix with pain and thoughts and inverts itself over time, we all have our legs pulled back and we all stretch, never fully living the moment we're in. Thank you for this read, it's been a delightful food for thoughts, I'm so glad I found it.

[Mark]

time hugs! :)

[Sid]

Very nice, it seems that the person is stuck in the past and is reluctant to move forward, holding on to the memories of that past. I like how you convey the transition from the past to the future, and the way you use those words is great as each has an impact and poem is very well expressed...great write!

[Mark]

it's actually a function of age I think. When you have 50 + years of memories you can't help but compare what was to what is and wonder at what might be. :)

[Sid]

You are right and I guess I'm just not there yet, but it is a great write!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you make such good use of each word in your poems...nothing unnecessary...

i like that succinctness...and "blue canvas, sad madness" really strikes me ....

"fell into tomorrow...legs caught in yesterday"

yes yes.

jacob

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful poem. I enjoy the journey and thoughts in your words. Last lines are true. We will mend and if we are lucky. Become more wise. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote