Drunk on Dreams

I started writing something dark for the season, but this insisted on being born instead. I should've kept drinking I think.

I don't know if it was after

or maybe it was before.

Time is just not right here

no ceiling, no f'in floor.

maybe it was the darkness

or pale skin from the moon.

Whatever did create this

has left us way too soon.

The blackness of the chimney 

the red rose almost sings.

sharpened thorns lost pity

and stung my head in rings.

We stand and shiver on carpet

lost in this place unkind

we never tried to stop it

this house made from my mind.

Dripping stairs all pooling up

fathom laughter  unaware.

in shuffles the drooling cup

with full and chasmed stare.

Angel wings and druid past

hanging in our balance.

Built decayed, not to last

my twisted pent up palace.

What should be love, not loss

is now dried bones in cancer.

longing lasts in maiden toss

no ringing phones could answer.

We'd spent this hot cold night

in glowing mildewed dreams.

We all knew soon it wasn't right

but all too late it seems.

For though it was creation

from a God forever poor,

We once bold, lost all sensation

while looking for a door.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

A nice flow of thoughts in the poem. Took me to many places and thoughts.
"Angel wings and druid past
hanging in our balance.
Built decayed, not to last
my twisted pent up palace"
The ending made the poem complete. Some doors cannot be found. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote'

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Hi Mark, a very dark and poignant expression of quietly raging at the moon. Reads so well with easy flow. Great.

[Mark]

Thanks John

[Bewitching Sensations]

great piece, loved the following bit

Angel wings and druid past
hanging in our balance.
Built decayed, not to last
my twisted pent up palace. :))

[mandy]

i like it mark,,,a little dark maybe, but it is the season,,,i like the contrasts you have used, well crafted. ,,,the red rose almost sings,,,,beautiful image. the 2nd verse, i could visualize standing in the darkness with the pale moon giving some light,,,all around good poem.

[That_Girl]

"What should be love, not loss

is now dried bones in cancer.

longing lasts in maiden toss

no ringing phones could answer." I like this a lot. This is dark and a little....eery. Have to agree with E.L.

Nice!

[Mark]

Thanks sweets :) glad you liked it and I was going for eery, so guess I did good!

[Mark]

Ooooh eerie, you're speaking to something bigger in the two first stanza's, I can feel it, but you're not sure, if you should have been drinking, to capture it better, or like it happened for real, and they left..... "almost kind of feeling" Stung your head in rings, means that, you're turning in circles? just wondering, obsessed? facts? loved that line though... reading further, you sadden me on the real/or made up fact of: " Osteosarcoma" to say it in latin terms... yearning, not getting, pain, and hope, I feel in the last stanza's, interpret only from a Dutch mind, remember, but I like your style... ;)

E.L.

[Mark]

Thank you dear lady, bone cancer was a metaphor if that makes you feel better? :) Thanks for your review and maybe I should have kept drinking ROFL The stung in rings line was meant to allude to a 'crown of thorns'.

No, it doesn't, I've lost some one speacial to it, and that's what touched me so much, but I see, you're on a hating path, I hope you find love within your soul, and see people mean it honest, with you, not sneaky. Maybe you should have drinking LMAO, to be at least in a delerium of denial truth. Thanks a lot dear poet for being such an nice American. :)

[Mark]

never a hating path... I used the cancer as metaphor for loss, or decay, of love. Never hate... :) I've lost my mother and quite a few relatives and friends to cancer, it's terrible stuff. I never drink to deny the truth, but I have drunk to numb the pain o truth! :)

Feewww, love that... thanks... English the scorpion ;) Indeed, glad you say that, I've too.... here in the Netherlands they use the word "Cancer" as a term of abuse among youth, I definitely don't and never did, because I know how much sorrow, and pain, and hurt goes with it.... "Cancer is here like they youth at your country sais: " Oh s**t" glad you are like me, always standing above hate. :) Have a nice eve, / night, sleeping time for here, as I'm in a bad jetlag.... ;)

*says, don't wear my nerdie glasses ;)

[Mark]

yes, it is really late/early where you are. Still an hour to go before midnight here. hope you get restful sweet dear one. :) Strange, Cancer is a swear word there.. you use latin to talk about the disease then?

Dutch, is a language, with many Latin in it, influences, Indo-German, but also Roman influences, so medial terms, are mostly all in Latin, a little transformed, but still the same. For me easy, to recognize, as for another more difficult, it's pretty interesting, how we live across England, but have many differences, and also many influences, the same time.... talk soon more about that philosophy! ;) goodnight dear friend :) sleep well.

But I speak fluently Italian, and some Spanish too, as I am 1/4 Spanish, and Lived in Italy for a couple of periodes, and I'm a huge language dork, so, some are better in math, I'm in Languages.... Alpha, and Beta differences...

I mean with that, Latin is easy for me, to understand, also loved the comment beneath, didn't need a translator :) lovely words, both over...

[KAOlmsted]

Veni Lego Amabam

I came...I read...I liked

[Mark]

Vos es pius , gratias ago vos KAO.

[KAOlmsted]

according to Google translates (because, let's face it, who really speaks Latin) you told me I am no good but you thank me very much *laugh* I am going to take that as a dirty compliment ;-)

[Mark]

rofl... ummm there is no negative, Vos = you es= are pius =kind :) not sure why Google would add a negative to that statement.... random programming error apparently.

RAM OS MISSING, technical s**t, for sure ;)

[KAOlmsted]

I like my version better *grin* Meanwhile, that'll teach me to try to be funny in a dead language ;-)

[Mark]

rofl! well, it doesn't quite ring like veni vedi veci but it was still witty. :)

[Mark]

Veni vidi vici? Guess I should go look it up. .. . naw..

It means I came, I saw, and overwon...

[That_Guy]

Victoria Amat Curam

[KAOlmsted]

Quod Guido est tam parum pudici *grin*

[That_Guy]

hahahaha oh Latin, so fun ;)

hahaha.... " amantes sunt amentes " lol I'm off, happy conversation :D

[KAOlmsted]

*laugh* night E.L.

Amor Omnia Vincit dear, night to you too love xo

[That_Guy]

well said.

Nighty night to you too that_guy! Namaste

[That_Guy]

dormire bene

Grazie di parlare in Italiano, sono felice che fai, sono stanca proprio, devo dormire, per fare nuovo arte presto, tesoro! stai bene, e fai il bravo! Eli :D

[KAOlmsted]

That_Guy...du är så flirtig *laugh*

[That_Guy]

Avy translate the Italian for me!

[That_Guy]

Jag kan inte hjälpa mig själv

[That_Girl]

Umm mine is rough as hell but something to the effect of "Thank you for speaking Italian. I'm happy but tired (?) so I'll sleep and make new artwork soon honey. You're great"

That's gonna be rough but... yeah

[That_Guy]

how's your Swedish?

[That_Girl]

lol what? Non existant!

I love to speak in Italian, I wished more ppl here could speak it :D

[That_Girl]

I wish mine was a little better haha

Lol, koket or not, I understand Sweedish too ha!

It's very simular to Dutch, auch... lol

[That_Guy]

I speak English, American haha, Spanish, spanglish, and some Latin, and a little French

[KAOlmsted]

*swoons* That_guy knows Swedish

I'm off now, it's getting freaky :P hahahaha love to all xo

[That_Guy]

haha

[That_Guy]

I know how to Google translate is more accurate.

It's the most raping factor of language, we can better fight a bit ;)

[That_Guy]

challenge accepted