Where you went

Loneliness, my favorite subject, well perhaps more obsession really.

The fog closes in around

Sometimes I feel so alone

I just watch my feet touch ground.

Walk the ache out of my heart

my life twists and then turns

I wanted you to be a part

and still my heart, it yearns.

I'd turn my soul out to you

I'd climb until I was spent

Anything to make it true:

where I'm going is where you went.

Dusty roads, long turnpike rides

Feeling the wind blow me 'round

This feeling I hold still hides

then jumps out to put me down.

I'm tired of just coping

though I still got my smile.

Thinking of you and hoping

We'll be one for more than awhile.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Photo and words. A amazing poem. Sometime the lonely road can show us the way to a better place. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Blue Ivory]

Great way to portray loneliness!

"where I'm going is where you went."

Love that line!
And I can relate to this poem right now. Though probably not in the same way as you. I love the sense of being lost and hopeless, yet obsessed with finding peace your poem gives off. Great work!

[Brianna Brie]

I really like this poem even though it makes me feel things I want to forget!

[Ruth]

This is a vivid portrayal of such an emotion, suffocating in a way, in a good way though :)
I felt this, potently so...
Awesome piece xoxo

[Mark]

There is a good way to suffocate? LOL thanks for your kind words, and I hope you know I'm just playing with
you

[Ruth]

lol I do hon...very welcome - I meant it hits hard...poignant xoxo

[The Random Writings Of ..]

"Thinking of you and hoping
We'll be one for more than awhile"
This line makes me think about - well about a lot of things - mostly loneliness. Longing for being one for more than a while.
The fog that surrounds you - alone - sadness, deep. I can't help but think of a deep think a grayness that enfolds your heart. This piece has more than sadness but a deep emotion, that burns into the soul. Very beautiful - very sad. A piece to relate to. Thank you for sharing.

[Mark]

Thank you Kate, sorry you can relate to it though!

[The Random Writings Of Me..Kates]

Your welcome :) But I guess relating to one's works is what connects us :)

[Mia]

Oh my! This made me sad. The first stanza hit me hard. The second stanza was just unfair...you can’t hit someone when they’re down! It’s just not right. I sincerely hope you don't feel this way anymore. I wish you all the happiness in the world. Maybe a little naïve of me but if that naivety makes you smile (really smiles...the kind of smile that shows in your eyes) then I will gladly be naïve!

[Mark]

I am smiling and you are sweet :)

[Mia]

:D happy to hear that!

[Bewitching Sensations]

deep and moving.. there's light at the end of the tunnel babe

[Mark]

thank you sweetheart xoxo

[Bewitching Sensations]

anytime babe x

[captain]

Profound and deep sadness. a touching piece!
I like it!!

[Mark]

Thank you captain

[rnuff]

Wow deeply moving least i think, but i don't think too much it hurts my head. I do love this it really got to me. Awesome write full of emotions.

[Mark]

no pain no gain right? :P thank you for the review, and it gratifies me that I can move people (especially lovely ladies) with my words :)