Evoked Memory

Something different, experimental for me.

Reflected through the prisms of your words

the sparkling lights illuminate

the map of my psyche.

Would I never have felt the experience

if you had never shared solid translucent dreams,

cold whisping from their freezer burns?

Stale butterflies and old grass smells

The scent of an insect torn. 

The birds crying foul.

From the deepness 

the high priestess

did summon, 

and so, half seen half felt, they came.

Reviews

[Mockingbird]

i like the imagery, it appeals to all five senses. this is great poetry.

[Stanley Wilson]

new style worked well mark love the verse stale butterflies and old grass smells gives me autumn vibes enjoyed it

[Mark]

Glad you liked it :)

[Cerise]

wonderfully described....specially the ending was fabulous..:)

[Mark]

Thanks :) Love your avatar btw LOL

[Cerise]

hahah...thankyou..:)

[eglantine]

This experiementing is working for you, Mark. I didn't care for the first stanza--it seemed to be precursery to the rest of the poem, like you were stretching getting ready for the actual poem. The rest though, wow! *wisping
"cold whisping from their freezer burns" "stale butterflies" "scent of an insect torn" and that last line, just wow. great job! Thanks for sharing.

[Mark]

Thanks Eglan... you are very perceptive, the first few lines did feel like I was stretching :)

[Belinda]

I like this, but I liked the last few lines. I don't know what this makes me think, probably not what you were thinking, but in art, and poetry, I think the reader is allowed to let this come to them they way they need it. Good art shows the emotion of the artist, great art bring emotion from the onlooker. Does that make sense? Anyways, You got me some emotion from this read! =)

[Mark]

Yes, it makes perfect sense and I love it when a reader shares what my writing evokes in them. Thanks Belinda :)

[That_Girl]

Thought evoking piece here. I really enjoyed it.

"Stale butterflies and old grass smells
The scent of an insect torn.
The birds crying foul" - this is wonderful. Well done!

[Mark]

Thanks hon, glad you liked it, I don't normally write like this. :)

[That_Girl]

It was wonderful. Keep it up! :)