Her Story Told

He tormented and teased

Until her blue eyes squeezed 

Her salty tears fell

And I could hear her cries

But she could not tell

As he covered it with lies

But one night he went

And it was the last one he spent

For when she screamed: leave me alone

All I heard 

Was that spine chilling groan 

His blood was spilled 

And the cold air was filled

With death and pain

He'd driven her insane

Now she sits in a cell

But her story, she will never tell

Author's Note

This is not something that's true, I'm not sure where the inspiration for this actually came from haha but I hope you enjoy

Reviews

[Calissa Knox]

I thought this poem portrayed pain perfectly. It reminded me of emotions locked up inside, and the feeling of not being able to express them. It shows the effect of hurt one person can cause to another. There is a strong theme of defeat and hopelessness to this poem, and I thought it was perfect for what you were expressing. This is a moving, and wonderfully written piece.

[InsanityIsMe]

Thank you :)

[Calissa Knox]

You're very welcome. :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

your poem portrays a woman in pain so well that the emotions come off the paper,who knows where our inspiration comes from but we should just be glad that it does.You are a great writer .

[InsanityIsMe]

Thank you :D

[Vidya Bacchus]

you are most welcome:)

[MsJewel]

I could feel the pain and the emotion in your words. There is a depth to your writing that is very impressive - although the story isn't real, it felt real to me. Outstanding writing.
:) Julie

[InsanityIsMe]

Thank you! :)

[Lyn Anderson]

This is a simple but eloquent twist on something that unfortunately happens more than it should. Perfectly conveys the emotion and it is easy to follow. I know it's an awful comparison, but there is "gasp" a Nickleback song with just this subject matter. Or "my name is Earl" - I would say, unless otherwise stated, I always assume a poem is fictional, otherwise I would be a monster shark wolf bisexual serial killer s**t woman/man - you get my point.

[InsanityIsMe]

Haha yes I get you but there's a good few of my poems that are from my own life situations and when I looked back at this one before posting it I was thinking 'I don't even remember how I came up with this one' haha and thank you :) What Nickleback song is it?

[Lyn Anderson]

I think it is called "Never Again" I am terrible with names of songs but good with lyrics.

[InsanityIsMe]

Ok, thank you :)

[MAC]

it may not be true but you certainly must have drawn upon your own life for this because you wrote pain so well.

[InsanityIsMe]

Thank you :)

[MAC]

welcome :)