For what ever my idea of love is

For what ever my idea of love is
you were its first step. 

Before you I lacked the clarity,
moments to be shared with others
naked, and uneasy, yet ready
both of us were equally bare. 
With unnoticed feelings 
we appeared to share.

I was prone to sweat
and you to run so far

Your way with words
my miss spelled errors
neither could equally meet,
we left with deep pockets 
of emotional war-fare.

I ended up in debt 
you had money threw the ear 

We had only our dreams
of what we wanted
wanted each other to be

I cared the way I could
and apart of you cared 

I loved the way I did
and apart of you loved?

I spent months flipping sides
walking on edges splitting my souls, 
realizing I had only taken my first step.

Reviews

[Elaenor Aisling]

Quite a lovely piece. I love the ideal of only having taken your first step. The poem's language is simple, but has that underlying quality of quiet brilliance. Great job!

[Emily Rae]

great. it took me on the twisted journey of wondering love and then grounded me in the line, "realizing I had only taken my first step."