Running Out Of Air

A French Sonnet

You have gone, and so the rains slowly fall
I cant breathe, And I'm running out of air
Broken, completely dead on this chair
Like a lone, old, broken, forgotten doll
So much i would give, to erase it all
Erase his face, erase his smile, all care
But i cant, I'm trapped in this vacant stare
And once again, my life is so dark, dull

I would never hurt myself, but I'll try
More than anything, forever say goodbye

I'm suffocating, running out of luck
I can feel life slipping through my fingers
Under deep water, i cannot linger
Without you here, my life would really suck 

Reviews

[Shadow of Sunshine]

i can tell you're influenced by Evanescence/Amy Lee...which is definetley a compliment...veri weel done, i really liked it!

[bluessadmood]

This is so nice and lovely..what a lovely song..
Now you are gone and the rain falls slow,I cant breathe running out of air
Alone old broken forgotten doll,Would give any to erase you,your face ,your smile
And I cant,I am trapped in your stare,Once again my life dark and dull
Wont hurt myself ,but i will try ,try to say goodbye,I suffocate ,run out of luck
Life slipping through my fingers,Into deep water I cant linger
Without you there my life is nothing,without you I just die
Lovely write..

[the darkest shadow]

Very blunt and gets the point across.. It shows deep hurt caused by a sole person who was important in their life. Perhaps its just my attraction to morbid poems but I really like this. well done!