Close To My Heart Beat

A French Sonnet

I cant help but wonder how you have been
I look up, into the skies of the night
I close my eyes, ere i switch off the light
I can feel my heart beating from within

Now i can hear the swell of sly violin
Its my afflicting tears that i now fight
Hoping and wishing for you with my might
That you'll tenderly take away my grin

My tears now trickle down my face, though I'm trying
I cant help but go on forever crying

Even though you are now, now roaming free
I will not let distance be my defeat
Forever will i keep you within me
Forever, dearly, close to my heart beat
 

Author's Note

"Even though you are now, now roaming free"
This is completely intentional

Reviews

[T]

It sounds so emotional and raw that I think your point comes across perfectly. It doesn't sound angsty either, like so many other pieces you hear lately. Good job.

I'm curious, was there anything to inspire this?

[Helena]

"Even though you are now, now roaming free
I will not let distance be my defeat
Forever will i keep you within me
Forever, dearly, close to my heart beat"

Touchingly beautiful. Well done!

Helena

[mmzx]

wow.
awesomeeeeeeeee.
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Hoping and wishing for you with my might
That you'll tenderly take away my grin

I like this part (!)

[Call Me Cash]

This is good, emotional. I like emotional!
Thanks for posting! :)
P.S sorry my reviews are shorter than usual...my pc's died and on my mobile now :(

[Shannon Carinne Sparks]

I like it. It's so sad though... brought a few tears to my own eyes.