Wake Me Up

A poem about self-injuring

Please wake me up

One touch, one touch

My kindly crutch

My love

My dearest love

 

All faults forgot

I want, I want

My confidant

My love

My dearest love

 

Open me wide

Untie, untie

The knots inside

My love

My dearest love

 

And turn me red

Again, again

Once more, my friend

My love

My dearest love

Reviews

[emipoemi]

Powerful! Profound! Well done! Took me a few reads to understand it (as usual....in a good way), and I should give the note of keep the full repetition on the second line of the first two stanzas (so "one" instead "a", and "I" instead of "If"). It has a far better sound that way, and also "If want" is kind of odd (both grammar and -more importantly- in meaning.....kind of confusing what you're going for with that "If")

[Inkh(e)art]

Ah thank you for the review and the suggestions. I made some edits :)

[emipoemi]

reads much better now! :)

[writ rajat]

Must to read poem very nice I will suggest one of my friend to read this to awake her

[Inkh(e)art]

Thank you for the review!