All That Glistens

They lay in the grass

Well adapted to the earth

Locked hand-in-hand-

And hand-in-hand again

 

Each with a leg entwined

Lovingly around the others

The way young lovers do

When clinging to each-others souls-

 

-each discovering the others’ 

And claiming it for their own-

 

She lay kissing at his neck,

He lay gazing at the stars,

Wondering how he ever caught one

And brought it down in his arms

 

They lay there as the sky turned gray  

And the morning fog settled, and then glistened

On their bones, and the worms retreated to the earth

Motionless, they lay in each-others embrace

As if the world was of no consequence to they.

 

 

They lay there for days, amongst the tainted grass

Amongst the smell and the swell of decay

The weapon used gone somewhere far downstream,

As too was the culprit, a jealous one they’ll say.  

 

Someday the knife will wash ashore,

and shimmer its innocence forevermore 

Reviews

[Moonie]

I like the setting in here, and the words. Although, "no consequence to they" really puts off the tone. You can write 'them' instead of 'they' here. The sudden use of archaic languge seems to disrupt the flow. Also, you can tryto shorten the 5th stanza. In the end, it's your poem, and the decision is yours. :))