sweet jehovah (02/19/08)

A non-erotic exploration of my feelings regarding my sexuality. Influenced heavily by the song "Guest Roo touch my lips. your fingers make my eyes cry sweet jehovah,

touch my lips.
 
 your fingers

  make my eyes cry

   sweet jehovah,

    make my skin sweat

     sweet jehovah,

      make my breath gasp

       sweet jehovah;


        fluttery kisses from your

         fingers intoxicate.

     
  
           your touches

            down my chest

             whisper

              sweet jehovah


               as we revel in what

                god himself commanded

                 not to do.
 

                  we are doomed,

                   my love. you
 

 

                    and i, forever


                       to whisper

                        sweet jehovah

                         as we tiptoe

                          towards eternity.


                           quite a trip; hidden

                            dark worlds away singing

                             sweet jehovah

                              while we sate

                               our hungry flesh.
 

                                sing "forgive me,

                                 sweet jehovah,

                                  forgive me.


                                   i know you grieve

                                    every time we

                                     touch, but

                                      it always feels


  so good."

Author's Note

Yes, the lack of capital letters is intended. Feel free to talk to me if it bothers you and I'll explain my reason behind that choice.

Reviews

[Angel's Lady]

Beautifully and poetically written...there's nothing but good about this write! Great job.

[Niko Azazel]

i like this i like this alot. it's very well writen and i like the "staircase" effect that you did with the lines. definantly going in my library awesome work

[Blue Bard]

Again, I like the movement of the piece. It has a steady rhythm, very lyrical. The repetition of sweet jehovah turns it from psalm to song of solomon. The strong desire and the tentative spirituality portray the human condition is a very strong piece.

[Tabatha P.]

Already I informed you that this one was my favorite but it bares repeating. Very good. I like the way it's broken up, only a few words on each line. It helps to create the moment. Set the tone. Bravo my dear.

[Jennifer]

I like the way this trickles down the screen. The repetition is fantastic.

[r]

well.. it is good! this font size is small and the tabs in are confusing