Pane

This is one of my favourite works. It has been published in an anthology book for webloggers.

She dances along a pane of glass
Wild and free
She has no set direction
Nor bonds to hold her back
She leaves a trail
behind her -- where she's been
I try to imagine her life before
A feat
                  Impossible

The sky beats a dull colour
it's grim sheen cast upon
my face
I hear the gentle rap upon my roof
The patter of countless trails
to follow
I smile -- faint, obscure
We've danced this step 
                  before

I place my finger
to follow the trail she left
I dance to her steps
jagged -- beautiful
And as she slips below the line
I stop for a moment
in mournful reflection
I slowly place my finger
upon another trail
And I think to myself
"Maybe, this time
                    she'll stay?"

Reviews

[Laura]

This is so vivid and so intense. I can imagine everything that is going on in it. I have to say, my favorite part is the second stanza, especially this, "I hear the gentle rap upon my roof/The patter of countless trails/ to follow". It played in my head so well and it was one of those parts in a poem where you say, "Wow, he has a way with words, this is amazing." So pretty much, the only thing I can say, is that, I am a fan of this poem, and also your others.

[heich]

love it..

[Jane Doe]

awwwwwwwwww i likiee
taylor recomended it to e but i se eher point exactly how could u its so awesome-ishly endearing makes my heart flop but then again may b just cuz im crazy
luv it
luv ya
-ajm

[Cassiopia Summers]

I agree completely with Taylor H. It is a wonderful poem, and it has good meaning.

[Taylor H.]

I really liked this poem! Its wonderful

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Great peice of poetry Scott. This one should be getting more reviews on here. Your descriptions are excellent. Love this one. Giving this one a rating of 100.

[Nicola Taylor]

Careful, people steal things on here. >;[.
Also, lovely.