My Prodigal Sister

I wish I knew what the hell to do... Written about my ex bestfriend... We've known eachother for about 10 years...

 

Can this friendship survive

After I knew it died?

Did I bury it alive

Or was it simply revived?

I hate you, no I love you

I don't know which one's true

 

I'm choking on our memories

I'm gagging on my pride

Can I let an old friendship truly die?

 

You stumbled back here

Now nothing seems clear

So here it goes

My prayer to thee

Please God what don't I see?

 

I don't know if I can do this

So maybe I'll slit my own writs

You're my prodigal sister

But my arms aren’t open

It's a warning sign

For our paths aren’t twined

 

So can I let it revive?

Or let the friendship once again die...

 

Author's Note

Don't know what to think... Any suggestions are welcome on improvement on the poem or situation if you wish... lol

Reviews

[These Haunted Hallways]

Eesh! Though it's a beautifully written poem, it has so much heartbreak and confusion in it. I know how u feel. Sister and sister, brother and brother, brother and sister...and Marsha Marsha Marsha! lol. There's plenty of fueds when these two dont get along with one another. One's jealous of the other, one wants to be like the other...so, it's hard when stuff like this happens. Every sibling goes thru it. Just hopefully that one day in time everything will resolve normally, so that all will love each other just like at the very beginning when u both were little. Strong, and indeed, an emotional write. Nice job with this :) *Hugs* Great pic of u guys btw ;)

B.A.

[Distant horizons]

Great write. suggestions??? i think your hurt is clear, but frienndship isn't. can you honestly say you could forgive? there would be nothing worse than forgiving and realising you were wrong. But on the other hand... can you forget the friendship? good luck in your decision.

[Chris]

"How well can you tread water?" A Cosby quirk of "Fates". When "family" are only acquaintances... all of you lose.

[Deaths Cold Kiss]

wow this is amazing.........

[Kerwin]

God...i feel the same way about a current friendship....part of me wants it to go away...most of me doesnt want that...couldn't handle it.

[universe-explorer]

hmm .. let it die.. we make mistakes, and we redo our works, everyone should get a second chance.

[hola amigo's/amiga's]

Though it's a beautifully written poem, it has so much heartbreak and confusion in it. I know how u feel.I think that u should write to him and ask him what he thinks of it! And what the hell r u really a vampire or r they jsut fake teeth please tell me? Write back a sap right away thanks.

[Ice Queen of the Vampir..]

Wow. I can totally relate to this piece. I had a best friend who was like a sister to me and we haven't talked in over 5 years. I've know her for like 8 and now we're trying to reconnect, but I don't know if it'll work. =/ Anyways, this is a great poem and very nicely written. Nice work!!!

Heather

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

I have had the same best friend for nearly twenty years and can't imagine who it would be if any of them ended... I can hear the hurt in you verse as you ponder what can be done... depending on why fractured friendships can be tough to revive but it is always worth a try.

[G. Harrison Quay]

Of course let it revive. A second chance is always the right thing, especially with
someone you love.
There's a lot of emotion in this poem; so much that it reads like raw emotion instead
of your usual level of excellence. But, you needed to get it out and I'm glad you did.

[Tenten]

four stanza second line, your skill is far beyond this line. first stanza 5th line elipsy's instead of the comma adds that pause of speak. you know my feelins on rhyming. otherwise this is an honest piece towards emotions.