Into The Darkness

 

Throw them into the darkness

To create the light

Show them love is there

Push them together

Force them to care

Chain her in his arms

Create an unyielding bond

Never are they allowed to part

Warm their wintered hearts

Throw them into darkness

May light begin to shine

Make them want each other

Make them start to pine…

Author's Note

Please don't just give me a good job, For how can i grow with just a Good Job...

Reviews

[dark and twisty]

i like the idea behind it...i think you're trying to make it simple yet profound..and the theme's about love and how it can be incited even in the darkness and so on...but maybe what i did not like was the implication that the love that transpired between them was from forced circumstances..cos i believe that no one can be forced to care or love someone else unless there wasn't an inclination to do so deep down inside in the first place..

[Clouded in Hopeful Illu..]

Well I guess forcing two people to be together would actually work and I think this is a marvelous idea. You really should expand on this.
Such as:
+ How did they end up in this situation in the first place?
+ Why are these two people being forced together?
+ Who is forcing them together?
+ For what reason?
+ Does it work?
+ Did these two people hate each other?

There are many more, I am sure you get the point however.
I really like this. Thank you for sharing.

[Wolfwind Words]

Well..I had to read it four times on two different times, but I finally got it!
When you take even the most foulest of adversaries, tie them together at the wrist and ankle, Isolate them and put them in the darkest most distance place from all of everything, They will, by lack of any other options, fall for eachother. Slowly they will know love. For that's all there is.

Or...they'l kill eachother.

A very deep poem. It made me think alot!

Infinity's Shadow

[An owl on the moon]

I don't recognize this muse! Love the contrasting presence of darkness and light... That movement and depth seemed to move around me as I read... The repetition brought about a lyric quality to your words... Simply brilliant!

[WordMaster]

Your imagery is outstanding for such a short poem

The pace and timing of this work of art is very well done

I enjoyed the lines� "Push them together, Force them to care..." very compelling

Looking forward to reading more from you

[Annalisa]

I love the flow and anonymity of this. I love it when people don't use names, it makes the characters more universal and easier to relate to. I also liked the voice of this, it reminds me of the third person omniscient narrator at the beginning of Shakespeare plays, setting the stage for some large drama and all I can keep thinking is "Okay, what happens next?"

If you want something other than praise I saw nothing wrong in the poem itself, but if you are looking to grow i would suggest trying something new. This sounds very much like all of your other pieces, very dark and mainly romantic. Perhaps try something that is comical. Try something you don't think you can do whether it is a style, a genera, or a formatting thing I don't know. This poem, while good, is very typical you. So try something that isn't and see what happens. :D

But I loved this..........

[Enigma]

This defnitely was something which was going on in my mind for quite some time but I couldn't really figure it out, let alone put it to words. Even if I'd done that, it'd be nothing infront of this...
That was great!! I liked it a lot. You've pictured forced love in a very impressive and effective way over here. So good, that the reader feels the same at some points....
Great Write!!!

[Legion]

Forced love? Interesting piece but not sure what is intended. Perhaps a bit more for emphasis.

[These Haunted Hallways]

Hehe, very nice and beautiful. Undying love shall always remain with these two here, and they shall be the catalyst in showing the world to start loving like these two. Great imagery, and love the picture :)

B.A.