Loser Vampire Freak

 

Don't Fix me                 cause I'm broken

 

    Don't leave me   cause I'm alone

 

                      Please can't you see that I am me

 

        The loser vampire freak

  

 

I am happy just how I am

 

                                  Don't fix me

 

             I am imperfect in my perfections

 

               Don't fix me

 

 

Don't you see that I am me

 

                                    The Loser Vampire Freak

 

           Accept me or leave me be

 

                   The Loser Vampire Freak...

Author's Note

Yeah, It's a little repetative but oh well.... Please don't just give me a good job, for how can we grow if we don't know what we are doing right or wrong...

Reviews

[Wolfwind Words]

Strong, Powerful, blunt and to the point! With the lines going back and forth, it reminded my of one who's thoughts and emotions are twirling around in a tornado.

You are you, who is anyone to ask anything different. A problem society faces alot these days, trying to change what they don't understand.

Perhaps someday in the near future everyone can just accept a person for who they wish to be.

Good piece!
Infinity's Shadow

[Wanda S. Paryla]

I won't say "good job" if you don't wish for it. I like the colors of the work, and the way the words are arranged on the page. But, what I will say is that I can truly relate to this one! As Aaron said, people try to change what they don't understand - or are afraid of. I know this first hand! I've been a victim of myth and over-reaction too.

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

Well written. I like the arrangement. And the different colors. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[Angelic Darkness]

I think this poem reflects who you are and your strength as
a individual to, someone who just wants to be themselves and
live like everyone else. Yes, it is repetative, but that's the only thing
I see...AD

[Tenten]

don't mind the repativeness so much cause thats my usual style and it is strong and very loud in the shouted whisper method i'll go with they guy who says its blunt too but it seems so sad that it makes me pout. still nicely done but i order to listen to 'in the mood' by glen miller now bou-chan. this does stand on its own from your other pieces though.

[These Haunted Hallways]

Oh, i totally agree with what u wrote. It seems that everyday we are judged by how we look and do things. People should see our hearts and souls first b4 they look at looks. Then they will see the real person inside...and out :) Beautiful as always ;)

B.A.

[ShantaeMarlinda]

I like your style of writing. It's simple and to the point. However, I don't necessarily agree with the message you're sending. It's one thing to embrace your faults, it's another to find contentment in them. Nobody is perfect but that doesn't mean we shouldn't strive to improve ourselves. Maturity and growth exist only in recognizing what is wrong and working to make it right. Maybe I'm interpreting it incorrectly, though. Either way, I enjoy your work.

[An owl on the moon]

Love the format of your words, the playfulness of the colors and the layout. Very intriguing to the content, which desires acceptance without compromise of who you are inside. Good job (I mean, excellent use of repetition and emotion to express your vivid soul)!!!

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To be changed! to be molded! to be shaped and baked into something your not! Oh how I get so frustrated when people try to do that to me! I can so relate to this piece! It's scattered form resembles the agitation of the situation perfectly!

There is no one right or wrong way! Only the individual way!

Great Poem!
Thanks for letting me rant!

Ash

[Legion]

I like the repetition, but I don't think your frustration shows through enough with this. Dig deep and relinquish that irritation or desperation onto the page. The font color change, although enhancing it a bit, doesn't really seem necessary for this piece. Throw yourself further into it than you can imagine. Can't wait to see what will come out. And personally, I wouldn't (and don't) think of you as a loser. Just different and there is nothing wrong at all with that.