Poison in Your Eyes

 

 

I am not the poison you think I am

I will not leave you living blindly

I will open your eyes

 

You will appreciate it some day

You will thank me for all that I have done

You are impossible when you get this way

 

I will not listen to your hurtful words

I will give you a second chance

I refuse to head others warnings

 

You do not deserve this chance

You have destroyed your friends

You think I am poison to you

 

I am not the poison you think I am

I will now leave you to live blindly

I will not open you eyes

Reviews

[Wolfwind Words]

It reminds me of those poeple that keep expecting one to be there, even though they themselves are not there for themselves.
I like the color scheme. It helps bring out the power of the lines and words.
The images jump out at me as i read. Allowing for the full flavor of the text to be seen in the light that it should.
This was a really good piece. It was a rant of sorts..at the same time an introspection into ones life. Not harsh and cruel or condencending, rather it flowed with intellegince and wisdom.

I enjoyed reading this!
Infinity's Shadow

[K. Aurora]

Sounds like someone trying to help a stubborn mule and they loose their patience and then realize the the mule isn't going to change.

Interesting color scheme. I think it works well with the back and forth of choice the voice of this poem goes through.

Nice.
Kansas

[closed]

Hm I really liked this one. "You do not deserve this chance

You have destroyed your friends" That's my favorite line out of the poem. It's seems pretty dark, ^_^ Nicely done.

[chris' girlfriend]

wow so dark!!!
i like it :)

[a Messenger]

It's sad that someone sees you as poison. Too bad they can't open their eyes and see the real you.
This is nicely written. Very expressive.

[Flow]

I like the determination in this flow, I wonder if it will be waisted as if someone feels you are poison it will take alot to change their view, still a nice powerful write!

[An owl on the moon]

Powerful movement in your words and message, reading almost lyrically. Just stunning!!!!

[Annalisa]

Hmmmm. This really reminded me of the Placebo song "A Song to Say Goodbye"... you should check it out. But back to the poem, I loved the concept, and half of the phrasings o.O I felt like the beginnings of the lines were awkward and forced but by the time you got to the end of the line it was all good again, and then you would begin another line and it would start all over again. If that makes any sense. So try playing around with it, perhaps try to be less repetitive in the beginnings?

But this was lovely.

[John Stussy]

the color scheme, when put to the white background, is the colors of the Irish flag.. idk if that fits exactly. maybe an acid green highlighted in black?