Defeat

 

My body shakes in terror

As you glide down the stairs

I avoid your glare

 

Hands explore my body

I fight the unyielding chains

 

Hands

 

Body

 

Hate

 

Heat

 

Fight

 

Slap

 

Fight

 

   ~Defeat~

 

 

My neck is bare and waiting

It seems to call your name

Body relaxed and yielding

Afraid to move again

 

Hands explore my body

You soon show your fangs

 

Hands

 

Body

 

Teeth

 

Skin

 

Fight

 

Blood

 

Hate

 

Heat

 

FIGHT! FIGHT! FIGHT!

 

  ~Defeat~

Reviews

[Enigma]

Whoa!! You had me trembling in my seat back there.What a frightening poem.*shivers*
It's as scray as it is good.The form you've used there is new to me but is still impressive.I hope I don't get nightmares (you're to blame!!)
Anyway, great write, Kristy.And all this time I thought ur name was Amy...(laughs at herself)
Fantastic Job!!!

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

Great vampire like piece. Dark, fantastic write.

[Fran Marie]

Wonderfully penned piece so well expressed~ THanks for sharing this~Fran Marie

[a Messenger]

Another great write Kristy. As usual, in your own unique style.
I loved it.

[shadadakiya]

well that was cool

[An owl on the moon]

Powerful and passionate! Such a moving work through the darkness and the fear of the soul. Excellent write!!!

[Annalisa]

I loved this! I like the staccato fell when you only use one word, it portrays the scene but leaves the reader to feel it as well...... I don't think I'm making sense but this was wonderful.

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

Wonderfully dark, beautifully penned. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[Wolfwind Words]

This was good! I loved the form you used, it caused the pace to fluctuate at key moments, keeping the reader riding your emotional rollercoaster.

It reads of trying to protect onself, but the underlying emotions show a glimmer of wanting it too.

It gave the sense of undying passion, mixed with being controlled by something far more powerful.

Great Write! :)