the demons I have not slain

the demons I have not slain

A Poem by Joseph Tafoya
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This is my first official poem you can be as judgemental as you want to this just tell me how well I have done and What I can improve on thanks

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People just don't know the feeling how much I'm hiding
People don't know the battles I'm fighting
I just really hate feeling all this pain
It'll be inevitable for me to kill these demoms I have not slain
Your asking me to do my best
But i try and and gave it nothing less
I never really tasted success
Because I'm a total loser a failure to society
You think you know me because I'm always smiling
But you don't know whats inside of me
If I was to die to day how will you remember me?
Will you see what I see
Will you have missed me?
Would you want me back?
Would you ask me to stay?
Help me with the demons I haven't slayed?
No you wouldn't
Hurt my self I couldn't
why? Because suicidal I'm not

© 2015 Joseph Tafoya


Author's Note

Joseph Tafoya
I still need to finish it I'm going to put some more work in here just tell me what y'all think so far thanks

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Besides the few grammar mistakes, I think this is okay for being your first. I like the strength of the voice in this poem, he knows his wrong but even if he hasn't slayed his demons he doesn't want to give up the easy way by killing himself off. Great job!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Joseph Tafoya

9 Years Ago

Thanks this is my first time sharing what I write about me on here my writing is my story and yea my.. read more
Tomoe Tellez

9 Years Ago

Why don't you try downloading "Grammarly", it is an app on google chrome that corrects grammar and s.. read more

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Added on October 15, 2015
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Joseph Tafoya
Joseph Tafoya

Kennewick, WA



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Well there's really not much to know besides I'm a young writer and I like to write about life on how teens like me see it or how anybody sees life. I can't find a genre for my writing. But my nicknam.. more..

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