Paper Scars

He holds the paper in his palm

staring down at the wounds he's inflicted

the words his biro carved into the page

leaving scars that wont fade

and as he closes his hand 

and tries to crumple the story

his fragile shaking body crumples too

under his minds dark hue

because trying to forget 

means he first has to remember 

if he wants to pull through

Reviews

[icelandicblue]

The idea of running through the fire to cleanse the pain is a daunting one. I like that you used the fragility of paper to represent what fragile beings we really are. I thought the poem had a sophisticated patina to it. Well done!

[paperdaydreams]

yes, i thought the paper would be a good object to compare the mind frame of a person to, thankyou :)

[Whiskurz]

I liked this it gives a sad lost feeling.....Well penned my friend....Whisk

[paperdaydreams]

thankyou, glad it conveyed that feeling :)

[ObscurityNone]

*to* "pull through", just a slight error I saw. I do believe these are "ramblings", as you mentioned before; it's the same sort of style I get into, and there is no harm in that, it means it is raw, and definitely to my liking. You did well, kiddo.

[paperdaydreams]

Oops, didn't noticed that, changed it now, thankyou, yes I do tend to ramble a bit but it feels more expressive like that :)

[ObscurityNone]

Precisely. x)