WAKE UP !

This is a little poem that I wrote a year ago , I know it doesn't sound professionnel but I think that the message is clear :) I hope you'll like it !

Stuck in dirt , stuck in dust .. Can't you see ?
Ask yourself what life realy means ..
Ask yourself and contemplate ..
You talk about beauty , you talk about happiness ..
But damn you're not aware ..
You have everything you need ..
But all you do is asking for more ..
More money , more strength ..
And much more years to enjoy 

your wealth and your strength ..
Stone hearted , narrow minded .. 
looking for what you don't own .. 
And forgot about what you already have ..


Open your mind , your closed eyes and see 
Look at the real beauty , 
touch it , smell it in every part of this huge world ,
Look at this universe perfectly made for us ..
Listen to these soft melodies played by 
the softest critters of the nature ..
Look at the stars glowing at night 
And feel the sun penetrates your body at day ..


It's life , O people 
Giving us a new chance to understand 
To make a large step towards the best 
To wake up from our lethargy 
And to learn how to give more than what we take...

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

"Open your mind , your closed eyes and see
Look at the real beauty ,
touch it , smell it in every part of this huge world ,
Look at this universe perfectly made for us ..
Listen to these soft melodies played by
the softest critters of the nature ..
Look at the stars glowing at night
And feel the sun penetrates your body at day .."
A very nice poem. I like those lines the best...:)

[Imane]

Yay thankyouuu :D I bet those lines like you too ^^

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[The Chosen]

This is pretty good. I like the message you are conveying. I've been taught my whole life this same message basicly.

[Imane]

Thank you so much for your review ! your opinion will help write better in these topics :)

[Joe Palmer]

I great poem, heartfelt and passionate. Tres bonne!

[Imane]

merci énormément mon ami :) glad you like it

[minisla]

People often forget the simple things in life which make us happy.

[Imane]

Absolutely :/ We should be more grateful for what we have instead of complaining and asking for more ! thank you sister for reviewing :))

[minisla]

Your welcome