Solitary

An extremely short story.

She sat there and felt the darkness swirl around her. Curled up on the farthest corner of her bed, she held with trembling hands the frayed edge of her blanket. “What is it about the night that makes us feel so alone?” She wondered, gazing at the black shadows in her room that reached to her with beckoning, gnarled hands. “Here there is no escape. We’re left all alone, prisoners of our minds… held captive be what should have been, and what was left unsaid.” 
For a brief moment she was close to breaking, hit hard by the swarm of thoughts that struck previously dormant chords on her heart. A small tear traced a path on her cheek, and carried on down her temple, mingling with her hair. She had worked so hard to keep everything under control, remaining calm when her world fell apart piece by piece. And now the most minute of tears, the very essence of her momentary instability, had ruined it all. She couldn’t let the darkness win again. Not now.

Still shaking, but with some indisputable determination, she smeared the wretched drip off of her face, clenched her jaw, and flicked on the light. 

Reviews

[A LoW pRoFiLe]

This is incredible! I can't believe someone could create such an atmospheric story using less than a page's worth of writing! Coming to think of it, this may be an interesting start to my book, called 'The Darkness'. If you gave me permission, I could use this story, edit it to make it more appropriate for my book, then I could add it to my story. Or I could recreate my story around this, and change the style of writing slightly, and I could write a really interesting, full length story! I hope you write more like this, I really enjoyed reading it.

[Cornelia DeDona]

I'm feeling this determination, and resolve. good job, I'm hooked

[AnnaMae]

This is very well written. ^-^ It makes me wish there was more to it! It also does make a big impact and i can really relate to it.~ Great piece! :D

[FireFly]

Short and powerful...very impressive! I love the character's determination not to give in. Beautiful :D

[Mockingbird]

sometimes when we're afraid we tend to ride it out as though we're attached to suffering. aware that the answer to her fears is right at hand she waits until the last minute, (after experiencing the breakdown of her mind) and turns on the light. concise and contained all the elements of a short story. excellent job.

[Sleeping Maiden]

Wow. Well written. Yes, it's quite short but i think it's powerful enough too. I remember as a child when i felt like this. THis brings back memories..
and fear can truely take a person's mind. It's horrible.. but i love the way you wrote this. You made me feel "afraid" in this piece. It's as if I was in that story too.
Beautiful... and quite a write. =)

[Aella.lives]

This is an extremely short story... That packed quite a punch... I think many people can relate to a moment in there childhood that this has happened to in some way or another... So well written... and amazing...

[fjgale]

This is really well done. I can literally FEEL the ache, the hurt, her inner fight/struggle to get through it and stop the darkness from winning. Good, inspirational ending, where she overcomes the pain and turns on the light.