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Experimental....

Weak-minded day dreamer

 

                        overwhelmed by his own ominous parade,

 

 

                                      he'll soon cease to operate

Author's Note

Experimental....

Reviews

[Layi Tate]

Interesting. ... I'm curious of what you were feeling when you wrote this

[Rob Santana]

I was extremely depressed, so yeah, (shrugs shoulders)

[Layi Tate]

I knew it ... I totally get it .... ;)

[Matching Socks]

I'm such a big fan of the short, direct poetry.
It packs such a big punch. Nice job.

[Rob Santana]

I love short poetry as well. A lot can come out of something so short. Thanks Ana.

[Matching Socks]

You're welcome.

[Winslow Des Totes]

At first glance I was confused but after reading it over a few times it opened it self up to me and I realized the depth this short work has. Bravo it was a success!

[Rob Santana]

When I wrote it then read it I was confused!! Just something I thought looked bizarre to me when I read it and I said yup perfect, hahaha. Thanks for stopping by..

[Winslow Des Totes]

Anytime ;)

[RayXor]

not bad not bad at all .

[Rob Santana]

Bizarre thoughts creep around in my mind late at night.

[RayXor]

its an all day attraction here at my twisted carnival

[MagicAl]

Powerful with so much depth and meaning in such little wording.

[Rob Santana]

Thank you very much MagicAl. Oh by the way, very cool avatar.

[MagicAl]

You're most welcome! And, thank you.. :)

[s y e]

This is short but powerful. I loved it... Not transparent at all, big bro. Loved this one, amazing job.

[Rob Santana]

Gracias...

[Lyn Anderson]

Oh I like this so much. It is everything that a short piece should be, and none of it is transparent.

[Rob Santana]

Glad you like it KL. Gracias..

[Ghost of Jupiter]

Short yet powerful... I love that. Weak minded day dreamer, makes me wonder what dreams make a person weak minded? Interesting and thought provoking write, Rob. Good job, as always... :)

[Rob Santana]

Good question. I don't know, maybe dreams that a person never pursues. When dreams come true and doors of opportunity open and a person doesn't take advantage. Does that make any sense?? I don't know....Glad you liked it...

[Ghost of Jupiter]

It makes complete sense... I see what you are saying here...wonderful write... I like your experimental side :)