ABANDONED

What happened to "for better or for worse,til death do us part"

We met when we were young

Stung by love, we fit perfect, like a glove

You told me you would never abandon me

We were meant to be, at least that's what it felt like to me

We encountered many trials and tribulations

Which in fact strengthened our bond

As time went by, I could feel your love fade away 

I thought you were my queen

Unannounced, randomly, you abandoned me

I gave you my life, in return you thrust a knife into my heart

Now its beats are far apart

I stand alone on a rainy day, watching myself decay

I wish we never met

I wish I could press reset to forget.......

Author's Note

You could have told me to my face, not through a text. How cowardly of you! This happened years back. I'm over it.........

Reviews

[Whimsy]

Personally I like it, but then again I'm not good at rhyming even when attempting poetry. Your punctuation could be a tad better, however the poem itself reads really well and I like how you've conveyed emotion here.

[Speak in Silence]

I am honestly feeling just like this right now. I love when I can actually relate to other people's work. This is a wonderful job. I honestly wish I could write like this. Lol I always seem to add something "dark" into it. I can never write a good tragic love without blood or gore. Again this is amazing, great job (:

[Rob Santana]

Thank you Miss Mayhem. It's funny cuz I wanna write dark poetry I have it in me with the horror that I've seen in my life. Also the love of horror and gore that I have as well,hahaha I love horror and gore.. Thank you.Sorry your feeling like this but at least we're in the same car,hahaha

[Speak in Silence]

If you want to weite dark I could probably give you some pointers if you want (: You are welcome, I was happy to read it. Sometimes it helps to know that someone is going through the same thing as you are and that you aren't alone (:

[Stanley Wilson]

cracking emotive work reckon we can all relate to the poem very powerful

[Lisa Ring]

Abandonment is like a death. Yet sometimes death seems easier. The worst is for your love to abandon you emotionally but refuse to physically leave. I feel your emotion. And in your lines I feel the rhythm of rap. Excellent.

[Rob Santana]

wow,I agree abandonment is like death,hard to deal with. Thank you for your kind words. I do like rap,OLD SKOOL RAP only,hahaha.

[Lisa Ring]

Oh, you're welcome. I like some new rap...not gangsta' rap. I love all kinds of music (except Country-hate it)- it's poetry you read with your ears! I admit, that was goofy :)

[Rob Santana]

haha I love all kinds of music but when it comes to country Im the same way I can't stand it.hahaha. I like goofy, I've been told Im goofy and a nerd= GOOFY NERD,LOL!

[Traycee]

Sounds like like my first marriage, I like this and can relate.

[Christopher Sales]

A deep poem that shows your character, as I read through it i shared your pain. While its true life has no reset button, it also has a funny way of making things happen, or so I've noticed.

[Rob Santana]

Hey thanks Christopher. Life is full of surprises,haha. Thank you for your friendship. Look forward to reading more of your stories and chatting with you. Keep up the awesome writing.

[Patricia B. Hepler]

Life has no reset button-or does it? You take, you give. It works, it doesn't work. Learn from your pain & try it again~ pat

[Rob Santana]

this is true,yes. wishful thinking I guess. Thank you for your honest imput. I really do appreciate it. Time to move on,right? haha

[Patricia B. Hepler]

:)

[Rob Santana]

My heart bled this one out.