Decieving

As lightening shone and thunder blew

I am born, and in plain view

I do the dance that dancers do

changing colors, yellow, white, and blue

I crash into the great unknown

The thunder is my quiet groan

I know that I am not alone

to share the chaos that I know I own

I know  that I am prone to destruction

my light may be my visual seduction

my bold introduction

This is the art of my horrible production

Reviews

[Silent Siren]

It has a dark flair to it which I find very alluring~!

It also has rhythm and it flows very well. Good job =)

[Arctic Fox]

capturing! I don't know what it is that I love about this one, well then again, I do know. I sings to me. I am at a point in my life where I have to face a great struggle and there is no backing out. I made my choice and now I have to go through with it. I feel as if I am the one crashing into the great unknown. And I have my best friend at my side. I chose the path of a soldier and in July it will be seven months of one huge intense mental game. Keep it up! The way I took it might not be the way you intended it to be, but none-the-less I grabbed me.

[Krishna]

Nice! I really liked this .. as Selene stated before I, the imagery is clear and the rhyme scheme well utilized -- I definitely encourage more of the same!

[Lucy Joan]

Awesome poem here. The imagery was clear with your word diction and smooth rhyming. I found it easy to read and imagine. Great write! ^-^