Insanity

Rosy death

And dirty roses

Nobody likes those kids with noses

Rings and bells

Things gone wrong

Empty hearts

Empty halls

Clicking off the evening news

Slipping on my rainbow shoes

See me shine so clearly

It’s the ones who don’t

That fear me

Bring the bagels

Feathers with rain

Cut me now

I’m going insane

Author's Note

A bit angsty, yeah? Choose not to punctuate this one either. I think it works. *sigh* I�ve been listening to too much of The Moldy Peaches

Reviews

[Sam Summers]

see, i read the moldy peaches thing before the poem, so when i was reading it it was to the tune of 'anyone else but you', or to the best of my ability anyway. my ability to bend things into tunes they shouldnt normally fit into. anyway, i was reading it all jolly and it said 'cut me now' and i just had to stop being jolly and go 'hm...' so yeah, good poem.

[Mr. Misanthrope]

I love this poem because while you are talking about insanity, the words being read are also structured in such a disorganised and insane way. Well done on creativity and originality. :)

[Salvatore Buttaci]

A fine madness! Very good. I like the way the rhythm imitates the cadence of an unstable mind. You must be a good poet to pull this off and yet be in your right mind. Wonderful!

Sal

[*~Imperfectly Me~*]

This really kind of made my night... it's so insane it's perfect.... I really liked the feel of it and it just seemed to flow... Great Job!

[Rainbowco]

Now, don't get me wrong I am all into rainbows (hence my name), butterflies, puppies and kittens too, but sometimes I just crave a little insanity! Great Write - I like it! I agree it works well without punctuation.

[DarbyDarby;;]

This is incredible! I'm sitting in front of the screen, reading this piece, and all I can think is "Wow. I want some serious doses of The Moldy Peaches now."
And then BAM! You say you've been listening to The Moldy Peaches.
I like your use of imagery. And how, it really does seem like you're going "insane".
Very very good.

[L.V. Ana]

I really like this piece. I like the way it rhymes and the imagery involved. Very good job.