Spiders

The spiders that escape me.

Scuttle, scuttle

The spiders in my belly.

They scurry overtop one another in their hurry to escape,

Prickle my insides sick.

Scratch at my throat,

As I try desperately to choke them with a cigarette,

Drown in a cancer cloud.

To late.

They slip from my lips,

Dirty legs carrying hairy bodies to the ceiling.

You pretend not to notice.

Author's Note

Not thrilled with the title. Might change it. I don�t really know where the heck this came from. I hate spiders...

Reviews

[Blade & Blood (The ..]

D****T! I HATE SPIDERS!!!

Sorry about that, I am just terrified of spiders, and I think this poem strengthened that fear... don't worry, that's a good thing; this is definitely an example of damn-near perfect imagery. :) Your word usage was absolutely phenomenal and did an excellent job in contributing to scare the crap out of me. "Scurry", "Prickle", and "Scratch" were the buzz words that made this poem great. ^^

Ironically Yours, Blade and Blood

[Rambling Prose]

Giggles! What better way to conquer a spider phobia than to get it uP and oUT of your system! This is certainly a fun piece & I enjoyed the experience. Now, off to wash the image from my lips!

~giggles~

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

Good poem. My daughter has to read this one she is scared to death of spiders. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[Stacey]

Ohhh I bet this would creep me out if I was afraid of spiders. I really like the fourth line and the words "scurry" and "hurry" in the third line. It's subtle word choice like that that makes me love certain poems :]

[Kadie Tee]

Oooo creepy. :D

I think I've had this nightmare before, hehe. Anyways, I love the line where you try to choke them out with a "cancer cloud," that was pretty nifty. :D And the person at the end who doesn't care to notice. What brought this poem about?

[The Pirate Zombie]

This is just amazing. I'm really in love with it. It gives me a totally wicked picture in my head. It's very inspiring, I feel like panting now. Good job it's really a nice piece.

[SweetPeachesAlways]

Dear God in heaven! Talk about Urban Legends come to life! Wow. Very visual, good write! Creepy little suckers....