Twas A B***h, I Used To Love

She wears her scars like pretty rings,

Holds them close like precious things,

Left in light for me to see,

I push her softly, ne’er let her be,

 

Demands are muted, never heard,

The year left dormant, undeterred,

She walks in sun yet longs for cold,

Her bruised remembrance always told,

 

I rend my flesh to mend her soul,

But kindness leaves my mind with holes,

I cry “I’m here!” on ears sewn shut,

My heart a bleeding little s**t,

 

Fleeting guises quickly pass,

She thinks they make her less an a*s,

My bridge, it burns, but never falls,

Like endless kicks right in my balls,

 

Yet here I stand, a wounded fool,

Her loving, caring little tool,

Forever, damning even lies,

Blah, blah blah, blah blah blah, dies.

Author's Note

Utter nonsense--the sort of thing that ensues when you project your thoughts like vomit onto a blank Word document. Serious? Dead serious. Yet ridiculous all the same.

Isn't love beautiful?

Reviews

[☮Alpenglow]

Lovely write. Your use of rhyme produces a leisurely lyrical flow, seemingly fronting a nearly visible sense of purity... Regardless, your inclusion of rougher words implies the darkness which has ensued since betrayal- hatred, hollow, bitter indeed and raw with experience. Perhaps I'm reading the emotions wrongly, but undeniably a good poem. Keep writing.

[sincitycitizen]

beautiful!

[nosuchsafety]

This...is awesome. It seems very well constructed, but as if it wasn't planned that way. By that I mean it isn't choppy. Like your thoughts always rhyme.
Very cool.

[bookworm]

Beautiful? Is that what the kids are calling it these days? Huh.

You wear your scorn well. Its so....lyrical.

[Tenebrousoul]

Great job! I really loved this poem.

[Lyzzy Redd]

I like it a lot. The rhyme is effective and works for the subject of the poem. The vocabulary was great, and so was the general flow. :) Well done!

[bob, small b. aka invs]

interesting write. can't decide if i like it or not. the traditional rhythm and rhyme schemes clash with the vulgarity of the language and the anger that's evident through the poem. that may be the point. hallmark meets sam kinison. i'll give you this much, it wasn't boring.

[Archia]

I adore this poem, just the style in which it is written is wonderful really.

[EightCloudArmy]

very deep and beautiful. Great job! keep up the great work!