Myth of Castration

the horns have been cut from the baphomet

now all that remains is a pentagon and three triangles

a grimace smeared across the goat's Mona Lisa sneer

                                     decrowned, disarmed

                                     bald but bearded

                                    weighted down at the chin

                                  a ferocious mouth

                                unguarded by skewers of deterrence

casturated of terror

                   dismembered, unendowed

the one born hornless shoots you a glance

                                  you take heed

                            she smiles

       showing rows of teeth.

Reviews

[Carmen]

Well i now know what a baphomet is...but gost and casturation? WTH. Your (clever?) wording has left me a bit confused although I did enjoy the imagery (once i figured out what baphomet was it made it slightly easier, lol). although i know you are smart, i can't help but feel you just randomly placed those lines and didn't spend a helluva a lot of time on this... i realize you like to put your lines way over to the right side sometimes and usually it works... i don't really feel it here. But, like I said, as always your choice of words and imagery are interesting, if nothing else.

[Jason Henry]

i see you have a style all your own. but once again, brilliance is evident in your writing! and again i was floored by each line! to me your like a writer before his time...the predecessor to the future greats. excellent composition dude...

[Don Coorough]

I enjoyed the symbolism here. What it means to me may not be what it means to you. However, there is much in the last two lines! The beauty of your use of symbolism is that it gives the poem multiple potential meanings and it can be taken on multiple levels. Conflict can exist in different arenas. I can see elements that indicate war, that indicate personal relationships, that indicate the so-called "war of the sexes," and inner conflict within an individual. I think this is a wonderful poem! - EllisD

[The Mad Prophet]

I really like this one. You break away from mundane points. You symbolism is unique, might have to give me a hint on where things fit in. But thats what I like about poetry like this. Poems that only the Author can truly understand because he placed himself in the poem. You wrote with thoughts, and beliefs. My Black Earth poem is similar when it comes to obscured meanings.

Now I get to play the guessing game. Female, possibly. Born hornless, like a female... I think I am on to something. Very well done :)

[Gandré]

I find the review of the reviewer "invs" outrageously bad. How can he say that this is poorly written! Does he have the author's consciousness? How would he be knowing? The errors in spellings are typos for I know the author since a long time! He isa universally educated person and yes, almost scholar, educated in philosophy, arts, history and English language, and one can see it; for he understands the holistic picture of this humanity - where so many look just into the details. A genie always is able to see the big picture and makes an imprint in form of words written succintly and making symbols; that's what this poem is offering to me....

So, This reviewer offered a mean review, to say here "you could stick to the language you generally use instead of trying to write 'poetic' " ---------------------ha ha ha, this I was or I am still used to be told by people without any talent, by pretenders stealing other people's ideas, by people sticking in their own insecurities. Unfortunately, a person can here create a fake account and so he would be able to give his insecure behaviour some credit....... but ......we just know....who they might be.

I'd say the author of this poem (for I know his brilliance) - is just ignoring this mean review. I see in picture reviewer's overweight: that says everything, does it say - weak personality? (this is not by me, psychologists say so). But no one is to blame for being unknowing one; lack of education, >> ethics, insigtful thinking, it can be everything.

I once was taught by a wise guy: don't talk to fools for you become a fool. So, I am mute now.


The is a wonderful way how a war is a grimasse. Oh yes they are grimassing in front of our faces twisting facts, cutting our right to know, just check where is the best information to the citizen www.wikipegia.org type into the search: reporters_without_borders

and see what ranking your country reached.

I found it amazingly well written. I think in the 9th line the word "casturated" has typo and should be "castrated". I might be wrong, and not a native speaker.

This was a great anti-war poem, bravo, Brett.

[Brett Campaigne]

thanks for the heads up on the spelling errors, hopefully they're all fixed.

[bob, small b. aka invs]

i almost NEVER say this, but this poem sucks really bad. it's pretentious. it's poorly written. and it's full of errors in spelling. i suggest you stop reading anton le vey and start reading a dictionary. there are some redeeming aspects here, though. visually, it works. i could see the picture you were describing. i think if you could stick to the language you generally use instead of trying to write 'poetic', you have some potential. good luck.