Envelloped

the first time i licked the coloured envellop open

                                      it had no taste.

Now, hundreds of licks later

       when my tongue touches

       the sight sticky adhesive

                     the flavour is strong with the gravity of iron

                     the dark nuance accompanying the taste of human blood

                     conductive substance, laced with that battery acid sensation

this taste is not in the envellop

          but in me

                                remembering

                                I am to become envelloped.

Reviews

[xlynne]

i really liked this! i especially liked when you said "...conductive substance, laced with that battery acid sensation.." that just left a really strong picture in my head. i love the format too, it adds to the confusion feel you feel at first, if that makes any sense at all.

[Deborah Shepard]

love the imagery

[The Autumn Faerie]

Although I'm not sure I catch the meaning of it other than relating to envelopes, I do love the imagery in this.
And I certainly can't say it's not original!

[Emily M.]

I'm just going to give a simple review. I love it. It is very honest and well written. It's something I really want to analyze and read over. Thanks for reviewing my work.
-Em

[windmill]

Hahahahahaha

Well, I guess I know what a homosexual is now.????

...Uh... Okay.







This is interesting. But you spelled enveloped wrong (one 'l').


Digging lines 6-8. Majorly.


Whee~
Sascha

[Thomas James Martin]

Well, I guess I know what a hemosexual is now. I did enjoy the nuances of this poem. Very well done.

Thank you for sharing and for your review of my poem.

Tom