Eyes Are Mirrors, Not Windows

the prettiest thing in my eyes is you

     our vice-versa visages playing Pong

you want to take iris portals

understand yourself through me

          but you will not pass my glass pupil

  without sticking your fingers into my shallow eye sockets. 

Reviews

[Dorchadas]

I liked this.
The romantic sentiment tho clouded by nihilism is there nonetheless.
Hope? A cautionary call for help?
Sometimes we build walls not to keep people out but to see who cares enough to tear them down.
That's the emotion I sence behind your words.
Maybe I've misread it and if I have I'm sorry, but a shielded soul is often a cryptic one ;)

[The Mad Prophet]

Interesting, I always state the mind is a mirror, and this proves it. People only see them selves in other people, though it's hard with the mirror is broken (Like my mind). Very well done, very well expressed. I have another mirror poem to add to my favorites.

[FoolsGold23]

Wow, interesting, I liked the idea in this one, those who choose not to see deeper into others' feelings and retain their guarded attitude to life often render their eyes no more than mirrors, (jaded mirrors at that).
This was a great read, lovely job on this!~Pyrite

[xlynne]

i liked this poem a lot. i've noticed that the way you write is the type where you have to think about it for a few minutes before you understand what exactly what you're saying and i really like that about your work. i loved when u saaid "....our vice-versa visages playing Pong.." that was a great way to express how you two see each other.

[Rod Zinkel]

Or until the autopsy. After reading several of your poems, I will have to re-read and take time as images have different implications from the ideas you present. I am glad your include images to grasp.

[SisterSadist]

This made me giggle with a bit of lovingly evil glee. It starts so romantic and ends so violently. I do enjoy the statement of "understand yourself through me" what better way to see ourselves than through others. It's a difficult perspective to gain.

[Jacqueline]

This is such a romantic way of showing vulnerability while remaining stern and unwielding to the commands of love!

[Siobhan]

Would you consider using "cannot" instead of "will not"? I like the brevity of this while still being full of depth.

[Anna]

I like this a lot! the first line...
"the prettiest thing in my eyes is you"
fantastic!
a powerful little piece!
I enjoyed reading it and look forward to reading more of your work!

[lilain]

Reminds me of Alice Through the Looking Glass...(at least the image of her before she follows through) I love it and your use of words are stunning!