A Soul Lily

Oh darling of my muse, hold me once more
So I cannot forget the way you feel.
Your skin, your eyes, your scent, I still adore
Above all and I wonder if you're real?
How like a lily laid amongst the thorns
You soothe my soul from all this worldly pain
And when you're near, I feel I am adorned
With all the love this world can let sustain.
How can someone, who hurts and feels like me,
Give pleasure to a soul, lurid and vile,
And yet you risk your own's eternity
To make my soul feel like it is worthwhile?
My tender muse, the darling of my thoughts,
You saved my soul from pain this life has brought.

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[GridLok]

Yep! Definitely one of your better compositions. The meter and rhyme flow and complement the sentiment … and while vividly conveying the sentiment, your verse does not drown in self-indulgent hyperbole. Well done!

[Fairytale]

So sensual and full of love. Beautiful write.

[Fragilebrokendreams]

Wonderfully done. Explains how we all feel once found in true love.

[realmwriter]

A beautifully written, mournful lament, that turns into a soul saving flowery tale of redemption and thankfulness. I really enjoyed reading this. Thank You for posting it...!

[Calypso]

I feel hallow now that my muses are gone.

[Lily Mae]

This is so beautiful.. I think any Lily would jump from the vase and find comfort in the gardens... :)

[Hotwater]

Sounds like you've been smitten!, would this be classed as a sonnet? You compare the lily to a "friend", how love can move the pen!... good write!
*bird*