Death Is Like Two Lovers Sighs

And older poem of mine. It is in Iambit Tetrameter, somewhat, it has 7 syllables in each line instead of 8. Similar to Shakespeare's "The Phoenix and the Turtle."

Death is like two lovers sighs

Moaning in the dark of night

While the life slips from their eyes

Lost in passionate delight.

Pieces of the soul will leave

With each breath the lovers breathe,

And each piece the lovers grieve

With each plunge one lover sheathes.

 

The pounding of each heartbeat

Rises and falls with each kiss,

Soon fading as inner heat

Cools in their triumphant bliss.

 

Now as they sink into sleep,

Holding one another close,

Lost in darkness, in too deep,

Each lover’s panting breath slows.

 

Their eyes now shut and dreaming

Like corpses under gravestones,

For hours they sleep as seeming

They are dead and all alone.

Reviews

[realmwriter]

I really like this piece. It has good flow and the rhymes work very well...! Nice job indeed...!

[Ruth]

Brilliant!
There is such deep resonating energy within this!
Powerful and a fav!
xx

[TJ]

So I looked at my RRs and saw all the ones I had from you an though 'this kid better be good' well so far I'm impressed.
Who would think to equate love with death as beautfully as you have here? Wonderful

[Lily Mae]

I love this.. amazing work..xx