Re-Evaluation

Me taking a look at my life

Standing here

On the edge of every

Decision

On the edge of every mistake

I've begun to make

 

I look out upon

The grey azure of the

Horizon

And breathe in

The frigid air

Of twilights passing.

 

Time begins to slow

And fall

Like a feather

Soft and delicate

Then the wind picks up

And carries it away.

 

All the world

Seems to rest

Upon my shoulders

Making it hard

To stand tall

Making it hard

To let go.

 

Fears lead to tears

That blind me

From the truth

Of it all.

Intrepid and clean

In destorted

Obscene.

 

I'm standing here

Upon the edge

Of every decision

Of every mistake

I'm about to make.

Standing on the edge

Of decisions and mistakes

I've made in the past.

 

I look out upon

The grey azure of the

Horizon

And breathe in

The frigid air

Of twilights passing.

 

 

Tuesday August 11th, 2009

6:38pm

Author's Note

This is me looking at the stages of my life...where I've been where I'm going. That and I was listening to "Canvas" by Imogen Heap

Reviews

[The Message]

You know, you're a very thematic writer... which is to say that you seem to revisit the same themes over and over, but not to the point of repetition... more like a new discovery within an old idea. You seem very focused in that sense.

Oddly, that reminds me of the writing style of Johnny Whitney in that he repeatedly returns to the same concepts over and over, turning it into something new and unique each time. All of this is to say that you need to listen to some more Blood Brothers, dear.

Oh, and I liked it, of course.

[Gregory H.]

You take a lot of looks at your life...I like this a lot...I like you poems cause there sweet and pack a punch...

AA
Gregory

[Jason]

Unique and intriguing prespective you have given the reader here. I really like the image it paints in my mind of one looking back at their life, as if it were "replaying in a crystal ball of sorts"...., it strikes a nerve deep in my soul and makes me contemplate things about myself. I really like this Ice! I know this goes without saying, but GREAT WORK!

[Cool Handless Luke]

I like this one ICE - I like how it kinda comes full circle from where it starts. It's like telling where you are going and then explaining the journey and then reminding about where you were going and it all comes together. Very nicely done.