open your eyes

It's a coarse feeling on the back of my tongue,

it's a rubber stopper on the ropes we've rung,

it's a personal poison that only corrodes me

and from the inside,

I know you feel it somehow if you'd only look.

I guess I just expected you to open your eyes,

so open your eyes for me....

It's on those nights where I'm waiting for a text,

you responding to my pleads on the east side of the moon;

I can feel it on those evenings where I'm calling your name

but how could you hear my song when they're only in a

whisper and gleaming through the fog?

I guess I just expected you to open your eyes,

so open your eyes....

It's a black sun that stings with acid on the inside,

corners blazing with fire that sings with sizzling grief.

It's on the scarred white of my internal fights that I

can't bear to speak of if I'm not with you;

It's one of those nights again,

It's one of my nights again....

If you don't turn your face I promise I'll catch your eyes,

but it'd be nice if I could feel the cleansing rays

boiling beneath my skin

cuz I'm not good for you and you're a flesh to my wounds

to scab over, to be burned beneath the surface;

Can't you see what you do to me?

You break me, you open me up,

but I love the way it hurts to say your name,

I love the way it stings.

I guess I just expected you to open your eyes,

so please open your eyes....

Reviews

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I know this feelings, very well written write!

[Poetic Beauty]

sometimes love can be a poison or a viscous cycle of never ending hurt then love then more hurt with no end in sight. You have penned these emotions well and the thought of letting go even though you know it is better if you do kills you inside. Sometimes you have to walk through the fire to reach the ocean. It may burn like hell but it is worth it in the end and is freeing. Love this write.

[Eile MacIntyre]

Splendid writing! It caught my attention and wouldn't let go.

[SOUL LESS]

I love the way it hurts. This is ridiculous. Though Eminem said this as well...it doesn't make sense. You can't love pain and hurt, especially if it makes you cut. I hate people who lie to themselves.
This is stupid though, how can u like someone who doesn't give a **** about you? And this is not born of one feeling, The feelings in this poem are jumbled and confused. You have a simple past, but raw emotions. And great writing skills.

[Naomi Roseღ]

This was really good :) I could relate to it A LOT. Good write

[Lily Mae]

I know this feeling all to well.. very well penned:) xx