First Kiss

I smiled,

You smiled back.

I nodded,

You brush my arm with your hand.

I shiver under the touch,

You smiled again and leaned forward.

I closed my eyes,

You lips brushed mine.

Slowly you pulled away,

Leaving me electrified.

I smiled at that feeling,

Instantly wanting more.

So I pulled you closer,

Deepening the kiss.

It was my first time ever

To have something like this.

Author's Note

What do you think?"

Reviews

[Kayliee]

This is so cute!! I'm probably going to end up forever alone, so I may not experience such a thing... XD.
Though your words were simple, the poem was kept at a high value. For one, simple words makes the text easier for the readers to understand. And second, the words you chose planted a vivid image in my mind--which I'm working on doing in my writing--, which I really enjoyed! :)
I look foward to reading more of your work!!

[Eagle Cruagh]

It happend to me just this mornng.
Is your name girl ? That`s it, that was you .
It was magic and we kissed. You held my hand
and we kissed and there was electricity in the
air.
----- Eagle Cruagh

[Rasta Babe]

Wow. It put a smile on my face I could tell you that :-) I like it *thumbs up*

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????? Is that what it's like?????? ......????........????? OH MY GOD! I'm not sure, I hadn't uhm ehem you know had one....

[Stargirl]

Short and soo sweet! Very cute ^.^

[Bailey C. Writing]

Very short, cute poem :) Well-written

[Falling Leaf.]

Simple, light, and something I can relate to :) Well done!

Kindest regards and best of luck,
Savannah

[Aeternal Oceanfire]

Wonderful! Oh how deeply I yearn for the feeling!

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

This was a very sweet poem. I loved how you described your first kiss. I could relate because that was the same way for me. I really enjoyed reading this poem. I did like the flow. Thanks for sharing. :3