Prologue

Three years ago...

“... I hereby call you, by the English Law and Parliament of Great Britain, a student of the Academy.” The person rose from his seat, extending his hand towards the girl in a gesture that meant for her to kiss the ring of his. The girl however restrained herself in the hold of Guards, who kept tight grip on her shoulders. Both of them moved her head to the priest, making her kiss the ruby ring on which also gemstones were embedded into the golden circle. Girl wrenched herself from the ring and the Guards, though still was caught by her dirty blond hair on which they tugged her head back.

The bishop regarded down at her face with a twisting smirk that showed off his disgust towards her as well as amusement at her actions. After the ceremony was ended and small group of people, who attended, finally left along with rest of Guards until girl and two of the Guards were remaining inside the church. It was quite beautiful more than she thought it would be. Stained glass windows contained the most beautiful pictures she had ever seen, the majestic high ceiling contained only glass allowing for everyone to see the falling rain pounding above on the roof, sound echoing throughout the church, and many more things that she would have seen farther inside, although the Guards pushed her towards the bathroom for her to take a bath and clean up.

Grimly entering the dirty and awful smelling bathroom, girl stood in front of the mirror looking right back at her own blue eyes. Her face had smudges of oil, dirt and ashes right across her cheeks along with some small cuts and a busted lower lip. She wiped the dried up blood from her mouth and sighed heavily leaning against the wall with her forehead against the mirror. When she looked up again, determination was coming back strongly from her look that went colder and colder with each second while thorns formed around her heart, shutting off the entrance and the exit of her emotions.

And that girl was me.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Egress]

I feel kind of stupid to just notice the tense change, but when I read, tenses really do fly out of the window.
This is a mistake I made sometime ago. Sudden tense change.

You started in present, indicated by the "have", "know", and other verbs. And at the last sentence of the first paragraph, you changed into past. (Didn't)
Watching tenses (so it's consistent) is a bit hard at first, but it can be done.

A word of advice: Use strong verbs. By that I mean, try to not use "was" or "were" and the likes and use the more specific verb.
"I was still hesitating." --> "I hesitated."
"I think I had a surprised look" --> "I think I looked surprised."

Peace!

[The XYZ Writer]

This was great, but you are kind of dabbling with tenses. Also, maybe you should flesh it out a little more, you know explain a bit, and add imagery about where they were and what they were doing. Also, maybe more dialogue. It would help a LOT. Try to make the dialogue realistic and interesting.
But the storyline is pretty cool. I'm definitely going to be reading more!

[Missy Moooooo]

This is such a sad chapter, Good write

[paparapapa]

Ugh. A typical I'm-leading-you-on-but-I-don't-want-to-commit kind of guy. So frustrating. :)) well, I think it was good for a prologue. It was interesting and intriguing. But by how you started it, this can be considered as a novel that concentrates more on romance since it doesn't have any trace of fantasy in it. But if you're okay with that, then it's all good. Also, Airon's reaction was not really that realistic. You could have made him ask her if she was really okay with it or something. But if you really wanted him to be that kind of a jerk, then I guess it's okay. Haha. Overall, I really liked it. It has enough spice in it. I'll continue to read more. ;)

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Goodbye now, Airon. We will never meet again.

:O awwwww! that sucks booty, this was a sad prologue then again it doesn't have to be all happy, but still good start. :)