Prologue

Three years ago...

“... I hereby call you, by the English Law and Parliament of Great Britain, a student of the Academy.” The person rose from his seat, extending his hand towards the girl in a gesture that meant for her to kiss the ring of his. The girl however restrained herself in the hold of Guards, who kept tight grip on her shoulders. Both of them moved her head to the priest, making her kiss the ruby ring on which also gemstones were embedded into the golden circle. Girl wrenched herself from the ring and the Guards, though still was caught by her dirty blond hair on which they tugged her head back.

The bishop regarded down at her face with a twisting smirk that showed off his disgust towards her as well as amusement at her actions. After the ceremony was ended and small group of people, who attended, finally left along with rest of Guards until girl and two of the Guards were remaining inside the church. It was quite beautiful more than she thought it would be. Stained glass windows contained the most beautiful pictures she had ever seen, the majestic high ceiling contained only glass allowing for everyone to see the falling rain pounding above on the roof, sound echoing throughout the church, and many more things that she would have seen farther inside, although the Guards pushed her towards the bathroom for her to take a bath and clean up.

Grimly entering the dirty and awful smelling bathroom, girl stood in front of the mirror looking right back at her own blue eyes. Her face had smudges of oil, dirt and ashes right across her cheeks along with some small cuts and a busted lower lip. She wiped the dried up blood from her mouth and sighed heavily leaning against the wall with her forehead against the mirror. When she looked up again, determination was coming back strongly from her look that went colder and colder with each second while thorns formed around her heart, shutting off the entrance and the exit of her emotions.

And that girl was me.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Egress]

I feel kind of stupid to just notice the tense change, but when I read, tenses really do fly out of the window.
This is a mistake I made sometime ago. Sudden tense change.

You started in present, indicated by the "have", "know", and other verbs. And at the last sentence of the first paragraph, you changed into past. (Didn't)
Watching tenses (so it's consistent) is a bit hard at first, but it can be done.

A word of advice: Use strong verbs. By that I mean, try to not use "was" or "were" and the likes and use the more specific verb.
"I was still hesitating." --> "I hesitated."
"I think I had a surprised look" --> "I think I looked surprised."

Peace!

[@JenniferNicholeAuthor]

I love the last two lines... very visual/mental. Catchy... I will read on. ~JenniferNichole

[brightaward]

Congratulations! This book has been nominated for a Bright Award! we will get back to you on November 30th for our winners.

[Summer'sBreeze]

Wow. O.O

LOVE IT!

Can't wait read more.
Awesome job well done. :)

[Gummy Bear]

Aw! So sad! Can't wait to read more! :D

[Starcaller]

Interesting, quite a bit different from the old version but still looks like it's going to be a great story.

[No name]

Nice write, seem like it will be a good book.

[Starcaller]

Aww...real sad :'( but it sounds interesting so far :D

[Aeternal Oceanfire]

I don't think I am going to end up liking Airon much. Still, I know I shouldn't be judging so early into the story. I feel sorry for Violet.

[Shep]

You need som help with tenses. In regarding third person writing. My advice is to read a novel and take notice the author does not use the word "I"outside diolog. Second ask a english teacher regarding the difference in frist person and thrid person writing and how each are used. You will most likely find first person is used in bios, letters. Second person is used for papers you will write in school. Third person is for story and novel writing. Read a novel or two and you will see. I have no idea what teachers are teaching these days or why students do not or refuse to listen. I beg for you to learn all you can.