On this Moonlit Night

If only on this moonlit night
I could have you by my side
As I watch this sparkling water;
Lay on your bosom my head
Listen to yo heart beat
Occasionally interrupted
By the murmur of the ocean
Possibly infuriated by the close embrace,
Pass my fingers through
As I drink the sweet scent
Of your glittering and glistening hair,
Feeeel the warmth
Of your long graceful neck
Revealed as you struggled
To adjust your scarf
To fend off the breeze's caress,
Into your large sleepy eyes gaze,
And feel your fresh misty breath
On my cold face;
I wouldn't say
I will be the happiest man alive
But I promise I will
Carry this memory to the day
I will take my last breath!

Author's Note

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Reviews

[❀ Gabriela ..]

This is so beautiful, really great job with the imagery and emotion. =)

[khalid]

great work full of emotions, nice images as well as nice word picking..i am fond of nature so i like any work reminding me of it although it can never be forgotten. thank you for writing that

[Mockingbird]

great imagery. i can picture this scene in my imagination. i could hear and smell the ocean on a moonlit night. i don't advise you to tell a woman you wouldn't be the happiest man because that would make her feel like a consolation prize.

[Thea]

Wow...That was a really beautiful piece...Very heartfelt, sweet and sincere! Great work!
:)))

[Honey54]

Beautiful! Great piece!

[Sugar Plum ♥]

I love this poem..Sounds so deeply in love, and devoted like endless well of love, without beginning and end! It`s so soft, beautiful and mystical ...it arises even feeling of melanholy in me, because of the moon night, long neck, scarf, large sleepy eyes..I really imagine all!
~nia~

[Angelic Surrender]

This is so beautiful! I love it!