Eyes Wide Shut

Is another day we didn't give away
Sufficient enough to lead us to the pearly gates?
Laying down bricks of an ominous fate
The other side is embedded in embracing unyielding faith
Eyes wide shut when I'm wake
Lost in a translation of vices, strife, and a need to escape
Hope others can relate.

Reviews

[Aarea]

Perfect. Just...perfect. Your poem is beautiful. Eyes wide shut when I'm wake...amazing line. Great job. It's impressive that you can think of language like that rather than follow the normal, boring phrases normal poets use. Nice work.

[NiceTouch]

Thank you for reading Aarea, and I greatly appreciate your comment! I try to think outside of the box when writing my poetry, and it's great to hear that you took notice to that. Thanks again!