I Used To Be a Butterfly

I used to be a butterfly,
I used to play around with light,
Agile and quick--I never missed
And no one thought it'd end like this.

But one day the light burnt me,
My graceful wings ached terribly.
It was the climax of my life,
The time I thought I was ready to die.

And I lost myself in pain,
I got to love it, I got insane.
The more it burnt, the more I craved,
But this path led me to my grave.

My graveful wings at last stopped still,
But I couldn't help my insanity
And day by day, piece by piece
I got to lose my graceful wings.


I used to be a butterfly,
But now I'm nothing but a lie.
My graceful wings I hold to me
To cherish, what I could have been.

"It's all their fault," I tell myself.
"It's all their doing, they cut your flesh."
But it's no use, I still believe
I could've been a different me.

Reviews

[Allen Smuckler]

wonderful use of metaphors...I absolutely loved the last stanza, especially the last line...
We are certainly different things at different times...always changing...sorta like turning the pages entering the next passage....or simply from caterpillar to butterfly...or
who knows what happens after we die...do we in fact come back in another life....another "me"?
I don't know, I'm just asking.
So much to read into this smart and telling piece Harmonia....Your use of rhyme is much more exact and your ability to integrate the near or slant rhyme was spot on and seemingly unforced.
I enjoyed reading this more than once.
well done
allen

[Harmonia Chimera]

It was, mostly, unforced. Sometimes, I had to look rhymes on rhymezone.com, 'cause, well, I'm Polish and I can't possibly know all the words, but I'm glad it turned out natural after all. Thanks a lot. I do enjoy your reviews and the insight of them. Even though poetry isn't my main line of work, it holds a special place in my heart and I'm glad people like it. So thank you!

[Allen Smuckler]

you're funny...and
you're welcome
allen

[SuspectGray]

I enjoyed reading this poem. I really liked the line "I used to be a butterfly, But now I'm nothing but a lie". Sounds like all of us once we leave innocent youth behind.

[Harmonia Chimera]

Thank you very much! I'm glad it's so universal :)

[The Mutterer]

This is really good, I am enjoying your work at the moment :D

[Harmonia Chimera]

Thanks a lot!

[Melanie Genevieve]

wow this is crazy. reminds me of a friend I know who did drugs and went to rehab. great write. Can't wait to read more!

[Harmonia Chimera]

And yet another interpretation! Thank you

[Anti Phalanx]

Really nice poem. Keep up the good work, I'm eager to read more

[Harmonia Chimera]

Thank you~!