Wires

I wrote this for a contest I entered called Spinechillers and it got published in a book, but I would love some feedback!

Two men dressed in sterile white pulled me by my arms down a desolate, hallway.  Screams came from all around; from the haunted souls stuck behind cell doors.

The men threw me into a small room and forced me into a chair.  A hollow-eyed woman followed them in.

She grabbed wires from the ground and started wrapping them around me.  I traced the wires with my eyes to electrical outlets. Several shower heads hung from the ceiling.  I knew what came next. Water poured into the room, the outlets went on, and my eyes closed prepared for what came next.

Author's Note

I wrote this for a contest that was to write a horror story in 100 or less words, that is why it's so short.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

A very interesting tale. I wanted to read and know more. Thank you Anastasia for sharing the amazing story.
Coyote

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

Great atmosphere built up here- makes you wonder what’s going to happen next- very captivating- great work🌹

[Anastasia]

Thank you so much!

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹🌹

[thalia]

I can imagine this as a scene from a movie. Great job!

[Anastasia]

Thank you so much!

[Neil P]

For a 100 word chiller you crammed a whole roller coaster in there! Loved it :D

[Anastasia]

Thank you, I'm glad you liked it!

[Sonnet]

I am not a native English speaker and I guess it is difficult for me to fully appreciate your story. Nevertheless it is scary because it sounds like something that could happen. I also like abrupt ends because reality is just like that

[Anastasia]

Thank you so much!

[¿]

This is really horrified!!
Like goose bumbs it gives if I close my eyes!
Horrifically penned Anastasia😊

[Anastasia]

Wow! Thank you, I'm happy you liked it!