Honor the Dead

Hands are dipping down,

down into the wet soil

their fingers grasp the dirt

and carry it above the ground

the soil is spread over the bodies

as they are burried in their boxes

their flesh is rotting,

bones dissolving to dust;

ashes to ashes,

dust to dust

 

Their eyes are sunken in

they have been closed

for people that never want to see again

those cold eye balls behind their lids

the people; the 'loved ones'

do not want to love them any longer,

they want to remember them

and bury them in wet soil

where they will be cold

and alone

with a rock above their head,

no knife.

Author's Note

It's just kind of random.

Reviews

[ganymeder]

Very powerful. Nice imagery. It really evoked an emotional response.

The only critique I have is that I didn't really understand the "No knife" at the end. Otherwise, wonderful.

[Emily B]

Dark and dreary, cold and dank, but right on the mark. Not random at all.

[Nana Carmine]

wow. I really like it. The words flow together really well. There are a few misspelled words but other then that I really see no problems with it.
Write on

~Nana Carmine

[THE BLACK SEAL]

good job buried was misspelled but good work

[Wolfwind Words]

I find it amazing how when a person dies, that so many of us can just dump the body in a lonely grave and move on so easily. I'm sorry but, that form has a lot of memories attached to it. I say either cremate immediately and give all the kin a little bit to hold on to, or put the dead on public display for a while. Or maybee a nice funeral pyre, like the norse did, burn the bodies in a honorable ceromony.
Good write!

[Shadows of Sight]

I have to agree with lori. the "No Knife" at the end kinda left me with a question mark. The only thing that came into my mind was that, when people are buried, their kin, don't leave them with a knife to cut their way out of the box???
I liked the way the rest was writen. I could feel the lonelyness of the dead, that's lowered into the ground to be forgotten by those above. Or at least their physical part. It's why we always are told, that people live on in our memories, I guess.
Good write! :)

[lori c]

may be random, but that doesn't diminish its sadness. i'm just not sure about the "no knife" at the end. i will have to work on that image. but oh, i do hope i show more honor than this to those who have died.